STAR HardProbes PWG

[Barbara Trzeciak <barbara.trzeciak AT gmail.com>]

Hi Gabe,

please find below comments to your nice slides.

- General: some slides look for now a bit like work in progress. 

   - Please unify the style of your slides' titles, you may add the STAR logo, use the footer on all slides. 

   - You have multiple slides titled "Results", please change to more distinct titles 

   - Please make the main points more readable, e.g. increase spacing between bullet points, use bold and/or colors to mark the important messages. 

   - Please update the figures' style so that the legends are larger

   - Use references to journals instead of arXiv or links

   - p_{T}, Anti-k_{T} - use subscripts

- s1: improve quality of the plots

- s1: Recent simulations -> Recent AMPT model simulations

- s2: Explain what is on the plots, n\sigma_pi, m^2

- s2: p+p -> p+p collisions, Au+Au -> Au+Au collisions

- s2: 200 GeV -> \sqrt{s_NN} = 200 GeV

- s2: give year instead of "Run"

- s2: Define ToF, TPC

- s3: explain what the lines on the left plot indicates

- s3,4: increase font of the figures' axis

- s5: dphi, deta, nsigmapion - use greek letters

- s5: middle and right figures - increase line width or use markers similarly as on next slides. Right plot - increase text of the legend 

- s5: you don't define "Jet Signal"

- s6-14: I suggest to add on the top of the slide, or in the title, which system(s) it is and what constituent pT cut

- s8-14: jets > 10 GeV -> jets with p_T > 10 GeV/c. 

- s14: it's too busy,  please try to reduce the text

-  Add a summary slide

Cheers,

Barbara

On Wed, Mar 15, 2023 at 5:02 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Gabe,

Thank you, It works now.

Cheers
Nihar

On 2023-03-15 08:56, Gabe Dale-Gau wrote:
> Hi Nihar,
>
> I just tried to upload again, I think it worked this time.
> Let me know if you still have trouble accessing the file.
>
> Best,
> Gabe
>
> On Tue, Mar 14, 2023 at 10:23 PM Nihar Sahoo
> <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
>> Hi Gabe,
>>
>> I still see access denied.
>> Please check again.
>>
>> Thank you
>> Nihar
>>
>> On 2023-03-15 08:02, Gabe Dale-Gau via Star-hp-l wrote:
>>> HP- Group,
>>>
>>> Apologies for the multiple emails. I seem to have encountered the
>> same
>>> issue with the upload that Yang He had.
>>> I am unable to view the page myself, getting an "access denied"
>>> message. Does anyone know how this can be resolved?
>>>
>>> Thanks,
>>>
>>> Gabe
>>>
>>> On Tue, Mar 14, 2023 at 9:29 PM webmaster--- via Star-hp-l
>>> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>>>
>>>> Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
>>>>
>>>> Gabriel Dale-Gau (gdaleg2 AT uic.edu) has submitted a material for a
>>>> review,
>>>> please have a look:
>>>>
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