STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Youqi,

Please find my comments on your nicely written DIS23 proceedings.


Abstract:
L9: CollinearDrop -> collinear drop [ all places] But not sure why you 
introduce this style. In literature, I don't see this.
L10: …method, MultiFold, and … -> …method—MultFold—and…

1. Introduction:
L21:    final-state particles  -> final-state hadrons
high-momentum-transfer  -> high-momentum transfer
L30: y1 and y2 are the -> y_{1,2} are the …
L38: "…with small θ, or large θ and large z. " -> Can you please check ? 
If it is correct; as in this analysis we use beta=0; then by definition 
small or large theta from SoftDrop.
L40:"…theoretically [9] (and the references within)," ->	"…theoretically 
[9],…"
L45-47: "…which reduces the …and pileup." -> …which reduces the 
collinear contributions from the splitting, the wide-angle contributions 
from the initial-state radiation (ISR), underlying event (UE), pileup as 
well as hadronization."
L50: ISR, UE and pileup  ->  ISR, UE, and pileup
L51: "Assuming that the QCD parton shower is angular ordered, .." -> Not 
sure why it is assumed? All QCD parton showers in vacuum are angular 
ordered (it can be space-like or time-like). Am I misunderstood here?
"As the QCD parton shower in vacuum is angular ordered,…" is not it 
correct?
L53: On the other hand, the opposite of CollinearDrop, SoftDrop, will 
then capture… -> Unlike collinear drop, SoftDrop captures … ->
L55:    can help illustrate ->       can help illustrating
Eq.5: p_T^2 is not clear. Please mention in the text. Not introduced 
yet.
L62: jet mass, to  -> jet mass to
L63:    radiation; we also ->        radiation. We also
L65: …Rg and zg, to study the dynamics of the parton shower. ->"… Rg and 
zg."  [Not needed "to study…" as you mentioned before]
L70: neutral energy towers 	are reconstructed from the Barrel 
Electro-Magnetic Calorimeter (BEMC).
-> neutral particles are reconstructed from the Barrel Electro-Magnetic 
Calorimeter (BEMC) towers.
L71: 		Same quality selections … -> what is "same quality selection"? 
Please mention explicitly or "The same event, track, and tower 
selections …"
L72: Events selected have a primary vertex location … -> 		Events are 
selected within $\pm$30 cm from…beam axis, and passed the jet patch…
 L76: 		(0.2 < ET < 30 GeV), using -> 		(0.2 < ET < 30 GeV) using [no 
","]
L77: "		neutral pT  scalar sum fraction < 0.9, " -> what is "neutral pT 
scalar sum fraction < 0.9,"?
L81: "…pT of the jet constituent i, "-> "…pT of the ith jet 
constituent,"
L82:            to be compared with -> to compare with the
L83:            uses Bayesian -> uses the Bayesian …
L96: 		using either MultiFold or RooUnfold -> using both  MultiFold and 
RooUnfold . [As you are showing comparisons using two methods]
L101: 		it is accounted for through simultaneous reweighting of -> 		it 
is accounted for simultaneous reweighting of …
L102: observables, based on prior ->                 observables based on 
prior

Results:
L104:           jets in -> jets within
L105: The error bands indicate systematic uncertainties. -> drop this 
sentence. And Put in the caption of Fig.2
L126: …perturbative DGLAP splitting function goes as 1/z -> 
…perturbative DGLAP splitting function follows 1/z behavior.

Conclusions:
I would suggest to include one sentence on "MultiFold" and "RoounFold" 
comparison based on fig.1. It is important.


Best
Nihar







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