STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Youqi,

Thank you for implementing my comments.

> I (actually this is Isaac's idea) introduced this style so that it is
> consistent with the style for SoftDrop. Is that ok?
This camel case looks good to me: "SoftDrop" and "CollinearDrop"

L34:  where y1,2 and φ1,2 are respectively the rapidity…->  where y1,2 
and φ1,2 are, respectively, the rapidity …

I sign off.

Cheers
Nihar

On 2023-06-29 01:53, Youqi Song wrote:
> Hi Nihar,
>
> Thanks for the comments. I have updated a new draft on drupal
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/DIS_Proceedings_062823.pdf.
> Regarding this comment:
>
> > L9: CollinearDrop -> collinear drop [ all places] But not sure why
> > you
> > introduce this style. In literature, I don't see this.
>
> I (actually this is Isaac's idea) introduced this style so that it is
> consistent with the style for SoftDrop. Is that ok?
>
> Best,
> Youqi
>
> On Tue, Jun 27, 2023 at 1:32 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> > Hello Youqi,
> >
> > Please find my comments on your nicely written DIS23 proceedings.
> >
> > Abstract:
> > L9: CollinearDrop -> collinear drop [ all places] But not sure why
> > you
> > introduce this style. In literature, I don't see this.
> > L10: …method, MultiFold, and … -> …method—MultFold—and…
> >
> > 1. Introduction:
> > L21:    final-state particles  -> final-state hadrons
> > high-momentum-transfer  -> high-momentum transfer
> > L30: y1 and y2 are the -> y_{1,2} are the …
> > L38: "…with small θ, or large θ and large z. " -> Can you please
> > check ?
> > If it is correct; as in this analysis we use beta=0; then by
> > definition
> > small or large theta from SoftDrop.
> > L40:"…theoretically [9] (and the references within)," ->
> > "…theoretically
> > [9],…"
> > L45-47: "…which reduces the …and pileup." -> …which reduces
> > the
> > collinear contributions from the splitting, the wide-angle
> > contributions
> > from the initial-state radiation (ISR), underlying event (UE),
> > pileup as
> > well as hadronization."
> > L50: ISR, UE and pileup  ->     ISR, UE, and pileup
> > L51: "Assuming that the QCD parton shower is angular ordered, .." ->
> > Not
> > sure why it is assumed? All QCD parton showers in vacuum are angular
> >
> > ordered (it can be space-like or time-like). Am I misunderstood
> > here?
> > "As the QCD parton shower in vacuum is angular ordered,…" is not
> > it
> > correct?
> > L53: On the other hand, the opposite of CollinearDrop, SoftDrop,
> > will
> > then capture… -> Unlike collinear drop, SoftDrop captures … ->
> > L55:    can help illustrate ->  can help illustrating
> > Eq.5: p_T^2 is not clear. Please mention in the text. Not introduced
> >
> > yet.
> > L62: jet mass, to  -> jet mass to
> > L63:    radiation; we also ->   radiation. We also
> > L65: …Rg and zg, to study the dynamics of the parton shower.
> > ->"… Rg and
> > zg."  [Not needed "to study…" as you mentioned before]
> > L70: neutral energy towers      are reconstructed from the Barrel
> > Electro-Magnetic Calorimeter (BEMC).
> > -> neutral particles are reconstructed from the Barrel
> > Electro-Magnetic
> > Calorimeter (BEMC) towers.
> > L71:            Same quality selections … -> what is "same quality
> > selection"?
> > Please mention explicitly or "The same event, track, and tower
> > selections …"
> > L72: Events selected have a primary vertex location … ->
> > Events are
> > selected within $\pm$30 cm from…beam axis, and passed the jet
> > patch…
> > L76:          (0.2 < ET < 30 GeV), using ->           (0.2 < ET <
> > 30 GeV) using [no
> > ","]
> > L77: "          neutral pT  scalar sum fraction < 0.9, " -> what is
> > "neutral pT
> > scalar sum fraction < 0.9,"?
> > L81: "…pT of the jet constituent i, "-> "…pT of the ith jet
> > constituent,"
> > L82:            to be compared with -> to compare with the
> > L83:            uses Bayesian -> uses the Bayesian …
> > L96:            using either MultiFold or RooUnfold -> using both
> > MultiFold and
> > RooUnfold . [As you are showing comparisons using two methods]
> > L101:           it is accounted for through simultaneous reweighting
> > of ->              it
> > is accounted for simultaneous reweighting of …
> > L102: observables, based on prior ->            observables based on
> > prior
> >
> > Results:
> > L104:           jets in -> jets within
> > L105: The error bands indicate systematic uncertainties. -> drop
> > this
> > sentence. And Put in the caption of Fig.2
> > L126: …perturbative DGLAP splitting function goes as 1/z ->
> > …perturbative DGLAP splitting function follows 1/z behavior.
> >
> > Conclusions:
> > I would suggest to include one sentence on "MultiFold" and
> > "RoounFold"
> > comparison based on fig.1. It is important.
> >
> > Best
> > Nihar
> >
> > On 2023-06-23 04:01, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
> > > Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> > >
> > > Youqi Song (youqi.song AT yale.edu) has submitted a material for a
> > review,
> > > please have a look:
> > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/64115
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