STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Tanmay,

Please find my comments on your nice proceedings.


Abstract:
observables from RHIC, using… -> observables, using… GeV collected by 
the STAR experiment.
Finally, data -> Finally, the data…
"This work is supported by the National Science Foundation under Grant 
number: 1913624." -> Drop this in the abstract. You should add in the 
Acknowledgment.


L9:early stages of high-enregy -> early stage of high energy hadron 
collisions [ because jet is more generic for pp collisions]
L10: dense bunchings of hadrons called jets -> as collimated sprays of 
hadrons called jets.
L12:	have  modified fragmentations… -> get modified relative to its p+p 
baseline. This is known as jet quenching [1].

L13: jets are probes of QGP -> jets are used as probes of the QGP.
L14: One way to access this information ->No clear, what information?
L17: 	Parameters 𝜅 and 𝛽 tune sensitivity  -> The 𝜅 and 𝛽 are parameters 
sensitive to…collimation, respectively.
L18: are infra-red -> is infra-red …angularity[],…which probes …around 
the jet axis.
L20: given by: -> given by,
Eq.1: Introduce pT,jet in the text
Eq.2: put "," at then end of the equation-2
Eq-3: put "period" at then of the equation-3

L22: Prior angularity based jet-substructure measurements… -> The jet 
angularity based observables like jet-substructure measurements in Pb+Pb 
collisions at sqrt(s_NN) = 2.76 GeV, at the LHC, have shown …

L25: 𝑝T,jetfrom  -> 𝑝T,jet at RHIC,
With higher interaction time in the QGP -> Drop it, nor required. [Note: 
at LHC energy, QGP time is large than at RHIC]

L26: will help understand … -> …will help to understand the jet-medium … 
with LHC.

L29: measured from -> measured in p + p collisions at sqrt(sNN) = 200 
GeV to set a baseline for heavy-ion collisions at RHIC.
    [Drop other sentence. Make it short and clear]

L31: a non angularity-based -> a non-angularity based …
L32: splitting in the jet -> splitting of jet

L33: Data Selection and … -> Dataset and …
L35-36: … GeV, collected…[]respectively. -> … GeV collected…[], 
respectively.

L36: TPC and BEMC ….->  The Solenoidal Tracker At RHIC (STAR) detector 
provides full…
L39: resolution parameter (𝑅) of 0.4,  -> 		resolution parameter 𝑅 = 
0.4,
L41: the larger heavy-ion analysis -> the larger heavy-ion background
 L43: atleast -> at least
L45: reduce fake jet -> reduce the fake jet
L49:	…was trained using using a simulation of detector effects and … -> 
…was trained using a simulation of detector effects, and …
L53: were associated. -> were used.
L53: The 𝜌(r) results were corrected … -> The 𝜌(r)  was corrected … [ I 
prefer in present tense through out the draft, please change it if 
possible]
L54: obtained using the aforementioned embedding simulation1. -> 
obtained from the aforementioned embedding simulation1.

L55: Results and Discussions  ->             Result and Discussion


L56: Differential jet-shape (𝜌(r)) -> Differential jet-shape as a 
function … axis is shown…

Fig.1 caption:  show ratio -> show the ratio …

Footer of 2nd page: "with thw unfolding" -> with the unfolding

L60: PYTHIA-8 Detroit/RHIC -> PYTHIA-8 Detroit
L61: show good agreement ->          show a good agreement


L64:    it away. -> it.
Figs. 3 and 4 -> Fig. 3 and 4 show the STAR data comparison with 
PYTHIA-8…
L65: …(quark jets) and (c) -> …(quark jets), and (c) …

L67: "on avenger" -> this is used multiple time. Please remove this. It 
reads awkward.
L70: PYTHIA 8 -> PYTHIA-8
L74: core jets p+p collisions -> core jets in p+p collisions
setting the baseline for calculating… -> setting the baseline for 
heavy-ion collisions to measure the medium-modification at RHIC. [200 
GeV is not needed to mention]
L75-76: With the …be noted. -> This sentence needs to be rephrased.


Cheers
Nihar


On 2023-07-08 02:56, Tanmay Pani wrote:
> Hi Nihar,
>
> It seems like this entry was not opening the pdf for some reason, I
> have reuploaded the pdf here:
>
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/Proceeding-2023_0.pdf
>
> Please let me know if you can open it or not.
>
> Thanks
>
> Tanmay
>
> On Fri, Jul 7, 2023 at 6:01 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> > Hello Tanmay,
> >
> > Can you please check this entry?
> > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/64227
> >
> > It shows "Access denied".
> >
> > Best
> > Nihar
> >
> > On 2023-07-05 18:43, Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l wrote:
> > > Hello Tanmay,
> > >
> > > I can see there are two entries on the same proceedings of HP2023.
> > > So I am going to rejecting this entries.
> > > and we will only keep the entry with 64227 and I will send comment
> > on
> > > it.
> > >
> > > Cheers
> > > Nihar
> > >
> > > On 2023-07-02 10:30, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
> > > > Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> > > >
> > > > Tanmay Pani (tp543 AT physics.rutgers.edu) has submitted a material
> > for a
> > > > review, please have a look:
> > > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/64226
> > > >
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