STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Xiaofeng Luo <xfluo.star AT hotmail.com>]

Hi Ho-san,

    Nice proceedings.
    Please find my minor suggestions below :

General :
     1. Abstract is a little bit too long.  The first few sentence 
could be merged into introduction section.

     2. Introduction may be divided into two parts, "introduction" and 
"experimental observables"
          Current intro. is too long.  or "Experimental Observable 
merged with "Analysis Setup" as
          as Section II.

More specific :
    1. Line 44, the the -> the
    2. Fig.1, should mention in the text and caption that the C5 and C6 
results from Au+Au , the first point
        on the right is 0-40%.
    3. Line 54, Compared to -> Comparing to
    4. Line 125, PYTHIA 8 0-> PYTHIA 8.2
    5. Line 114, in charged particle multiplicity -> as a function of 
charged particle multiplicity.
    6. For reference, please put (STAR) after author names , if those 
are star publications.
    7. I suggest to cite  : PRC 104, 024902 (2021), and arXiv : 2207.09837
    8. The title, please use \mathrm before NN. not italic.
    9. In you proceedings, when discussing Fig. 1 and 2, you may 
specify, the results from ZrZr and RuRu are consistent.
   10. Line 77, I suggest to delete : "for the first time", and in 
summary delete "highest precision data".
   11. Line 154, a smooth crossover -> a smooth crossover in central 
Au+Au collisions at top RHIC energy.

    With those implemented, I sign off.

Thank you,
Best Regards,
Xiaofeng

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