STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

["Fan Si" <sifan98 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn>]

Dear Hanna,

Thanks a lot for your comments and suggestions. 

The shown results are arranged according to their motivations, and the outline and the logic of slides are changed accordingly.

In Slide 6, information of run-10,19,23-25 for 200 GeV dataset is mentioned.

In other slides, "\sqrt{s_{NN}}" is added to the places of collision energy "xx GeV".

The modified draft can be found in the following link.

https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/WHBM-2023/Fluctuation-measurements-RHIC-STAR

Best regards,

Fan

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主题: Re: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Fan Si for WHBM 2023 got commented by Toshihiro Nonaka

Dear Fan,

I have suggestions to consider for your nice talk:

General comment: when you present the following results, you could arrange them according to the cross-over measurements, 1-st order phase transition, critical point, and other /future physics motivations (however, it would change the current logic of your presentation completely, leave as you have)

Slide 6: when you mention the 200 GeV dataset, you can consider adding information about Run-10.

Slide 12: when you mention any collision energy, please add \sqrt{s_{NN}} = (first and fourth bullet)

Slides 13, 16, 18, 19, 22: the same comment as at slide 12.

With those implemented I sign off.

Thanks,

Hanna

Hanna Paulina Zbroszczyk

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Dear Toshihiro,

Thank you very much for your comments. I have revised my slides accordingly, and the updated draft can be found in the following link.
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/WHBM-2023/Fluctuation-measurements-RHIC-STAR

Best regards,
Fan

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主题: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Fan Si for WHBM 2023 got commented by Toshihiro Nonaka

Dear star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,

Toshihiro Nonaka ( tnonaka AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov ) has commented on a material  
originally submitted by Fan Si ( sifan98 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn ) at
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/WHBM-2023/Fluctuation-measurements-RHIC-STAR

Comment:
Dear Fan,

Very nice slides. I have only a few minor comments as follows:

s4: It might be informative to write as "Skellam = Poisson - Poisson = C3/C1  
= ... = 1"

s5: Right bottom, red-highlighted: "HRG" -> "Lattice QCD"

s10: 3.1-σ -> 3.1 σ (remove hyphen)

s11-S12:
- I would suggest to show the lattice results in s11 and the collision energy  
dependence of C5/C1 and C6/C2 in s12 on the same slide.
- I would remove C4/C2 results in s12 to make some space for the lattice  
results.
- Instead, you could show the lattice results (in s5) again in s11.

s14: "Consistent with each other" -> "Smoothly connect each other"

s18: (2023-2025)

s22: Hint of smooth crossover at top RHIC energy

With these considered, I sign off.

Best regards,
Toshihiro

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