STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Hanna Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl>]

Dear Vinh,

Find below my general comments to your slides:

Outline will help to navigate through your talk, without outline nobody knows what to expect next and what is the story of your presentation.

S2: Generał motivation is missing, just menton that „Femtoscopy is a powerful technique to study charateristics of systems of femtometer scale at kinetic freeze-out” doesn’t explain what you really want to explore.

More detailed information is needed (description of the source, parametrization of FSI, etc..)

charateristics -> characteristics

S7: \epsilon_F is undefined

S8: The motivation of studies the tilt angle is missing

S11: It will help if you mention why you consider kaon femtoscopy, whan can be learnt from kaons additionally to pions?

S13: You need more discussion about quantities measured with nonidentical particle correlations, definitions of C+, C-, C11 are missing, citation of the paper should be more visible 

S6: make reference to the STAR paper more visible

S14: add a reference to source imaging methodology, citation of the paper is missing, make reference to the STAR paper more visible

S15: LL parametrizatodn of FSI should me discussed here and explanation how we conclude about a0, f0, and a0 as a tetraquark

S16: LL paremetrikation is missing, make paper citation more visible

S17: add references to arXiv STAR paper and to the coalescence model used in the analysis with deuterons

S18: adding spin composition will help for d-\Lambda

S23: mąkę references better visible

S25: Summary (and my general comment to your talk):

Showing 9 (2+7) different bullets will not help to memorize the content of your talk.

Try to write 3-4 messages you want people to get with them and try to build your talk according to theses topics.

I suggest to reorganize your slides according to the story you wanna say.

I hope it helps,

Thanks,

Hanna

prof. dr hab. inż. Hanna Zbroszczyk
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