STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Vinh Luong <lbavinh AT gmail.com>]

Dear Hanna,

Thank you very much for your detailed comments and suggestions.
I have modified the slides accordingly and uploaded to the same link.

Thank you and best regards,
Vinh

On Wed, Nov 20, 2024 at 3:52 PM Hanna Zbroszczyk
<star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> Dear Vinh,
>
> Find below my general comments to your slides:
>
> Outline will help to navigate through your talk, without outline nobody 
> knows what to expect next and what is the story of your presentation.
>
> S2: Generał motivation is missing, just menton that „Femtoscopy is a 
> powerful technique to study charateristics of systems of femtometer scale 
> at kinetic freeze-out” doesn’t explain what you really want to explore.
> More detailed information is needed (description of the source, 
> parametrization of FSI, etc..)
>
> charateristics -> characteristics
>
> S7: \epsilon_F is undefined
>
> S8: The motivation of studies the tilt angle is missing
>
> S11: It will help if you mention why you consider kaon femtoscopy, whan can 
> be learnt from kaons additionally to pions?
>
> S13: You need more discussion about quantities measured with nonidentical 
> particle correlations, definitions of C+, C-, C11 are missing, citation of 
> the paper should be more visible
>
> S6: make reference to the STAR paper more visible
>
> S14: add a reference to source imaging methodology, citation of the paper 
> is missing, make reference to the STAR paper more visible
>
> S15: LL parametrizatodn of FSI should me discussed here and explanation how 
> we conclude about a0, f0, and a0 as a tetraquark
>
> S16: LL paremetrikation is missing, make paper citation more visible
>
> S17: add references to arXiv STAR paper and to the coalescence model used 
> in the analysis with deuterons
>
> S18: adding spin composition will help for d-\Lambda
>
> S23: mąkę references better visible
>
> S25: Summary (and my general comment to your talk):
> Showing 9 (2+7) different bullets will not help to memorize the content of 
> your talk.
> Try to write 3-4 messages you want people to get with them and try to build 
> your talk according to theses topics.
> I suggest to reorganize your slides according to the story you wanna say.
>
> I hope it helps,
>
> Thanks,
> Hanna
>
> prof. dr hab. inż. Hanna Zbroszczyk
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> Dear star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
>
> Vinh Luong (lbavinh AT gmail.com) has submitted a material for a review, please
> have a look:
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/69910
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