STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG

[Prithwish Tribedy <ptribedy AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Dear Vipul,
 Here are my comments on your nice proceedings. With these incorporated, 
I sign off.

Abstract:
"indicating a difference" --> "that is consistent with the difference"

"when compared" --> "when comparing" or say "...between isobar and 
..(other) systems"

line 4: "the key observable" --> "one of the key observables"

line 6: "Anisotropic flow is usually refers to" --> "Such an observable 
measures"

line 12: "re-scattering" --> "rescatterings"

line 14: "during" --> "in"

line 16: "data of" --> "data in collisions of isobars"

line 18: "called the" --> "driven by a phenomenon called the"

line 18: "The two isobars" --> "It was realized that the two isobars"

line 20: "importantly measurement" --> "importantly, measurements"

line 24: You are saying "in heavy-ion collisions" should you instead say 
"in isobar collisions"

line 26: "respect the event" --> "respect to the event"

line 30: "and properties of" --> "and the properties of"

line 32: "proceeding" --> "proceedings"

line 41: "shows pT" --> "shows the pT"

line 44: "which suggest the formation of the" --> "which suggests the 
formation of a"
I think this point about "QGP medium in isobar" is redundant.

line 48: Add "v2(pT) of" after "show" & revise the sentence

line 55: It is not clear what you mean by "2% within statistical 
uncertainties". Are you saying "2% deviation that statistically 
significant". Or, maybe you quote the significance of the deviation to 
make things clear. Something like "about 6 sigma for "\Lambdas" but less 
than 2 sigma for K_s0". Please make this clear.

Fig.4 and below: Somewhere you have to mention that you're showing 
statistical uncertainties only.

line 56: "which might be effect of different deformation parameters"
--> Maybe rephrase it like "consistent with the difference between the 
nuclear structures of the two isobar nuclei".

line 61: "remove effect of" --> "remove the effect of"

line 64: Define NCQ

line 65: "indicate" --> "indicates"

line 65: "dominate" --> "dominant"

line 66: Remove "process"

line 76: "and three" --> "and in three"

line 78: "hydrodynamics" --> "hydrodynamic"

line 80: "dominate" --> "dominant"

line 84: "nuclear density for the medium produced" --> Not clear what 
you mean. Maybe say something like "collision geometry on anisotropic 
particle production".

Best,
Prithwish





On 2022-10-10 11:46, vipul via Star-fcv-l wrote:
> Dear Conveners,
>
> Please find below link to the ICHEP-2022 proceedings.
> Please give your comments and suggestions.
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> Thanks,
> With Regards,
> Vipul
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