STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG

[Zhengxi Yan <zhengxi1yan AT gmail.com>]

Hello, Fuqiang

Thank you very much for the comments. I have implemented them in the new version.

>1. motivation

Modified and consolidated to remove extra material.

>second bullet: through -> thorough

corrected.

>I'd delete "to pin down QGP formation" because you start off saying we want 
>to understand collectivity, so I won't change abruptly to QGP.

corrected.

>"System size dependence of evolution parameters in heavy-ion collision." 
>seems weak and is already covered by the other bullets. I'd simply delete it.

deleted.

>2. detector
>Try to keep the bullet texts on a single line each.

done

>3. Methods
>suppress -> suppresses
>Is TPCa with |eta|<0.5? Right now you wrote |eta|<1.

It is correct with |eta|<1.

>4. Results
>STAR preliminary on all and each plot

Done.

>Below "2-particle flow w/ non-flow subtraction from TPC-TPC or TPC-EPD", add 
>"nonflow subtraction by the c1 method"
>Would be good to have some details on nonflow subtraction in the method 
>section.

Added the line below the plot title and c1 non-flow subtraction in the method.

>Add a bullet on the OO and HeAu, dAu comparisons

done

>5. Summary
>"2-partilce correlations are similar in wide rapidity range measured." -> 
>seems to me that you want to conclude on v2,v3, not 2-particle correlations 
>which are vague here.

changed to v2, v3.

>Maybe change "uncover physical implecations such as the role of different 
>stages in driving the
>collectivity in small system collisions." -> "investigate the role of 
>different evolution stages in developing collectivity in small system 
>collisions."?

changed according to the suggestion.

On Fri, Aug 25, 2023 at 10:40 PM webmaster--- via Star-fcv-l <star-fcv-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Dear star-fcv-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,

Fuqiang Wang ( fqwang AT purdue.edu ) has commented on a material originally 
submitted by Zhengxi Yan ( zhengxi1yan AT gmail.com ) at
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/Quark-Matter-2023/Measurements-harmonic-flow-and-their-fluctuations-16O16O-collision-0

Comment:
Zhengxi,

I was asked to review a few posters including yours. Please find my comments 
below.

1. motivation
the first bullet is weak. It can be said to a lot of nuclei. I'd delete it. 
Or you may say OO is somewhere between dAu and CuCu. Nevertheless, I'd start 
with the second bullet, and then say that.

second bullet: through -> thorough

I'd delete "to pin down QGP formation" because you start off saying we want 
to understand collectivity, so I won't change abruptly to QGP.

"System size dependence of evolution parameters in heavy-ion collision." 
seems weak and is already covered by the other bullets. I'd simply delete it.


2. detector
Try to keep the bullet texts on a single line each.

3. Methods
suppress -> suppresses
Is TPCa with |eta|<0.5? Right now you wrote |eta|<1.

4. Results
STAR preliminary on all and each plot

Below "2-particle flow w/ non-flow subtraction from TPC-TPC or TPC-EPD", add 
"nonflow subtraction by the c1 method"
Would be good to have some details on nonflow subtraction in the method 
section.

Add a bullet on the OO and HeAu, dAu comparisons

5. Summary
"2-partilce correlations are similar in wide rapidity range measured." -> 
seems to me that you want to conclude on v2,v3, not 2-particle correlations 
which are vague here.

Maybe change "uncover physical implecations such as the role of different 
stages in driving the
collectivity in small system collisions." -> "investigate the role of 
different evolution stages in developing collectivity in small system 
collisions."?


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