STAR HardProbes PWG

[Yi Yang <yiyang0429 AT gmail.com>]

Hi Veronica,

I have some minor comments/suggestions on your poster for your consideration. 

  - Abstract: 

     - STAR measurements --> the measurements 

     - remove "(as shown below in ATLAS data)" 

     - -- including.... EA -- to study --> , including ... EA, to study 

  - Introduction: 

     - Title: Introduction and motivation (? up to you)

     - remove "(right)" 

     - Move "p+A collisions ..." to the second bullet 

  - Jet and UE measurement method:

     - remove "method" (? up to you)

     - Are you using "charged jets"? If so, it would be better to mention it. 

     - I have difficulty connecting your content with the right plot (probably it is just me). This is a very nice plot, but it would be great to mention what "East jet", "West jet", "UE_East", and "UE_West" mean (how they are used in your analysis). 

  

  - Experiment and Event Activity

     - "Event activity can be related to impact parameter, and therefore is used as a proxy for centrality": Just for my own education, why don't you use the standard definition of centrality? 

     

  - Jet and UE measurement results: 

     - Remove "Mean pT of UE particles (not shown)..." since you are not showing it. 

  

  - Jet mass as a function of EA: 

     - Do you need to emphasize "especially at lower jet pT bins"? They all look consistent to me...

     - You need to emphasize the top plots are "ungroomed" jets and bottom plots are "SoftDrop" jets

 - Activity-dependent jet yields:

     - Right plot, you might need to define Delta_phi (the small cartoon plot is not sufficient). 

     

 - Conclusions: 

     - I don't see the results to support the first bullet. Probably I missed something. 

     - Move the third bullet up (before the second one) 

     - Is the last bullet related to the third one (re-emphasize)? 

Cheers,

Yi

On Thu, Jul 7, 2022 at 9:12 PM Sooraj Radhakrishnan via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Veronika,

   The poster reads good. Please find a few comments from me below

Abstract: '(as shown in ATLAS data)' - do you need this in the abstract?

Introduction: significant jet modification in p+Au 

Method: p_T,lead^reco is undefined

Experiment: Towers have a trigger cut off, isnt? You list the range from 0.2 GeV

Experiment: Scintillator detector 

Jet and UE results: First bullet can be removed, as you dont show them

Jet mass: Jet mass need to be defined. You dont discuss about jet mass in the introduction, why it is interesting to study isnt indicated 

Jet mass: second bullet: where do we see this consistency? 

Activity vs jet yield: First bullet: Can this bias on the EA selection be quantified from these distributions? Does it explain the observed modification?

Activity vs jet yield: Second bullet: Is the same observed also for EA_BBC selected events?

Conclusion: EA anti-correlated?

Conclusion: Second bullet: where do we see this?

Conclusion: Third bullet: Is there a strong centrality dependent modification for the jet mass in A+A collisions?

Conclusion: last bullet: the part after hyphen can be removed 

thanks

Sooraj

On Thu, Jul 7, 2022 at 5:06 PM Barbara Trzeciak via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Veronika,

nice and clear poster.

Please see my comments below. With these addressed I sign off.

Introduction:

- Yet ATLAS (right) and PHENIX observed significant jet modification -> Yet ATLAS and PHENIX observed significant jet modification in p+Au collisions

Jet mass

- Consistent with QCD predictions and STAR pp data - you don't have on the plot neither QCD predictions nor pp data, right ?

Since conclusions from the top and bottom plots are the same, I would suggest replacing one of them with a plot showing a comparison between the p+Au and pp results. 

And I guess the conclusion on the consistency with QCD predictions is based on the p+p paper ? If so, I would suggest moving the reference closer to the statement, now it looks that the plot is taken from this paper. 

Activity-dependent jet yields

- Right plot: the legends and labels are very small, please enlarge them. 

 = 200 GeV = 200 GeV -> = 200 GeV (the energy is doubled)

Cheers,

Barbara

On Thu, Jul 7, 2022 at 1:03 PM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Veronica,

Please find my comment and suggestions on your nice poster.

Introduction:

_Yet ATLAS (right) and PHENIX ..   ->  ATLAS and PHENIX … (please
provide references to these results)
_"WHy ?" Remove it

_"p+A collisions thought too small for QGP formation "  Need to mention
what that is "small"? For example, system size, initial energy density,
etc

_"How does the hard scattering in an event affect event activity (EA)
and underlying event (UE) at mid-rapidity?" -> You need to mention what
is EA and UE.

_Just after the above statement.
This ATLAS plot does not fit to the physics message.

Experiment and Event Activity:

_Mention what is eta?
_"|η|<1, " - > "|η| < 1 " (similarly below) _ "Charged tracks …" and
"Neutral tower…" in box; please include in the TPC and BEMC bullets (no
need to have a separate box)
_"the inner BBC signal" -> what is that signal? ADC/hit/ etc.


Jets and UE measurement method:

_R=0.4 -> mention what is R?
_ Need to mention what are  phi_lead, phi_trig, phi_UE, eta_lead?
_what is p_{T,lead}^{reco}? Mention it.

Jet mass as a function of EA:

_Define and mention what is jet mass?
_Consistent with QCD predictions and STAR pp data  -> "Consistent with
QCD predictions" or "STAR p+Au data and QCD predictions are consistent"


Activity-dependent jet yields:

_"The distribution of EA_BBC is inversely correlated to leading jet pT"
and also its bullet -> Please rephrase this; not clear


Conclusion:
"Dependence of soft particle production on the initial hard scattering"
-> How do you draw this conclusion?
"Indicates EA vs. Q2 correlations from early time effects" -> Not sure,
How do you draw this conclusion?
"Jet quenching in p+Au collisions disfavored—no sign of final state hot
nuclear matter effects" Very strong statement. I would suggest to drop
this or mild this statement. Not sure how do you get this conclusion?


Cheers
Nihar

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Kent State University

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