STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Issac,

Thank you for updating with line numbers.
Please find a few comments on your nice proceedings.


L16: "…collisions, number in the tens." -> Not clear, Please rephrase.
L26: "…LHC data." -> "… the LHC data." ; "UA5 ppbar data at 200 GeV" -> 
"the UA5 paper data at $\sqrt{ s}$= 200 GeV"
L43-46: Please split this long sentence into two or three.
L56: "…non-perturbative and perturbative physics." -> "…non-perturbative 
and perturbative QCD physics."
L59: "             with data compared " -> "with the data compared…"
L69: "leading track pTs " -> "leading track pT"
L75: "             of LHC data …" -> "… of the LHC data…"
L77: "…for forward rapidity STAR [19] and BRAHMS [20] data were 
inaccurate with the new tune…" -> Have we discussed this in the text or 
in the publication with some plots and information? If not, then I would 
just drop this and only mention the next sentence (L78-80). That is 
enough.


Cheers
Nihar

On 2022-11-12 02:07, Mooney, Isaac wrote:
> Ah, sorry about that Nihar. I’ve updated v0 in-place to include line 
> numbers.
>
> Best,
> Isaac
>
> > On Nov 11, 2022, at 6:48 AM, Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l 
> > <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> >
> > Hello Issac,
> >
> > I have started reading your proceedings.
> > Can you please include the line numbers in this draft so that it will 
> > be
> > helpful for commenting?
> >
> > Thank you
> > Nihar
> >
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