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[Sooraj Radhakrishnan <skradhakrishnan AT lbl.gov>]

Hi Issac,

   The proceedings are well written. I sign off with a few minor comments

L36: The 30% increase is relative to the Monash tune, isnt? Should be mentioned

L41: What is response here?

Fig. 2 and 3. The observables should be briefly spelled out somewhere, in the caption on text

In the abstract you devote much attention to the inability describe yields at forward rapidity, but no discussion on it/figures are presented in the text. Since its only in the conclusion, could exclude from the abstract

thanks

Sooraj

On Wed, Nov 16, 2022 at 8:36 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Thank you, Isaac, for implementing my comments.
I sign off.

Cheers
Nihar


On 2022-11-14 23:15, Mooney, Isaac wrote:
> Hi Nihar,
>
> Thanks for the feedback. I’ve implemented the changes in v1 now on
> the node. As for your question about line 77 — yes, it’s in the
> paper. I added another citation of the paper in that spot so readers
> know to go take a look if they want more detail.
>
> Best,
> Isaac
>
>> On Nov 14, 2022, at 12:08 AM, Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>
>> wrote:
>> Hello Issac,
>>
>> Thank you for updating with line numbers.
>> Please find a few comments on your nice proceedings.
>>
>> L16: "…collisions, number in the tens." -> Not clear, Please
>> rephrase.
>> L26: "…LHC data." -> "… the LHC data." ; "UA5 ppbar data at 200
>> GeV" -> "the UA5 paper data at $\sqrt{ s}$= 200 GeV"
>> L43-46: Please split this long sentence into two or three.
>> L56: "…non-perturbative and perturbative physics." ->
>> "…non-perturbative and perturbative QCD physics."
>> L59: " with data compared " -> "with the data compared…"
>> L69: "leading track pTs " -> "leading track pT"
>> L75: " of LHC data …" -> "… of the LHC data…"
>> L77: "…for forward rapidity STAR [19] and BRAHMS [20] data were
>> inaccurate with the new tune…" -> Have we discussed this in the
>> text or in the publication with some plots and information? If not,
>> then I would just drop this and only mention the next sentence
>> (L78-80). That is enough.
>>
>> Cheers
>> Nihar
>>
>> On 2022-11-12 02:07, Mooney, Isaac wrote:
>> Ah, sorry about that Nihar. I’ve updated v0 in-place to include
>> line numbers.
>> Best,
>> Isaac
>> On Nov 11, 2022, at 6:48 AM, Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l
>> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>> Hello Issac,
>> I have started reading your proceedings.
>> Can you please include the line numbers in this draft so that it
>> will be
>> helpful for commenting?
>> Thank you
>> Nihar
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Sooraj Radhakrishnan

Research Scientist,

Department of Physics

Kent State University

Kent, OH 44243

Physicist Postdoctoral Affiliate

Nuclear Science Division
Lawrence Berkeley National Lab
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