STAR HardProbes PWG

[Yi Yang <yiyang0429 AT gmail.com>]

Hi Isaac,

Thanks a lot for the nice proceedings. I have only some minor comments on v1 for your considerations: 

- L13: transverse momentum --> transverse momentum (pT)   (probably remove the one in L33, before Eq. (1)?) 

- L16: The order of the reference is a bit strange, it starts from [5]. 

- L30: Ref. --> Refs. 

- L61: Fig. 2 --> Figure 2

- L67: Add reference for CDF underlying event data

Cheers,

Yi

On Tue, Nov 15, 2022 at 1:47 AM Mooney, Isaac via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Nihar,

Thanks for the feedback. I’ve implemented the changes in v1 now on the node. As for your question about line 77 — yes, it’s in the paper. I added another citation of the paper in that spot so readers know to go take a look if they want more detail.

Best,

Isaac

On Nov 14, 2022, at 12:08 AM, Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Issac,

Thank you for updating with line numbers.
Please find a few comments on your nice proceedings.


L16: "…collisions, number in the tens." -> Not clear, Please rephrase.
L26: "…LHC data." -> "… the LHC data." ; "UA5 ppbar data at 200 GeV" -> "the UA5 paper data at $\sqrt{ s}$= 200 GeV"
L43-46: Please split this long sentence into two or three.
L56: "…non-perturbative and perturbative physics." -> "…non-perturbative and perturbative QCD physics."
L59: " with data compared " -> "with the data compared…"
L69: "leading track pTs " -> "leading track pT"
L75: " of LHC data …" -> "… of the LHC data…"
L77: "…for forward rapidity STAR [19] and BRAHMS [20] data were inaccurate with the new tune…" -> Have we discussed this in the text or in the publication with some plots and information? If not, then I would just drop this and only mention the next sentence (L78-80). That is enough.


Cheers
Nihar

On 2022-11-12 02:07, Mooney, Isaac wrote:

Ah, sorry about that Nihar. I’ve updated v0 in-place to include line numbers.
Best,
Isaac

On Nov 11, 2022, at 6:48 AM, Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
Hello Issac,
I have started reading your proceedings.
Can you please include the line numbers in this draft so that it will be
helpful for commenting?
Thank you
Nihar
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