STAR HardProbes PWG

[Yi Yang <yiyang0429 AT gmail.com>]

Hi Veronica,

Thanks a lot for the updated version. It looks good to me. Since time is limited, let me push this to the STAR Talk. Others can comment on it there.

Cheers,

Yi

On Mon, Nov 21, 2022 at 7:10 AM Veronica Verkest <vverkest AT gmail.com> wrote:

Hi all,

Thank you for the comments. I have updated the draft here (https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/61702) and implemented as many changes as I could without extending past the page limit. Yi--I use the STAR detector overview for my specifics on all the BEMC, BBC, and TPC, and this is reference [6]. I moved the citation to be more obvious, but please let me know if this needs to be changed so that the reference is proper.

Thanks,

Veronica

On Sun, Nov 20, 2022 at 12:18 PM Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Veronica,

Please find my comments below on your nice proceedings.

L10: "…partons in a collision. " -> (not clear what is " a collision.")
"…partons in collider experiments." Or "…partons in a hadron-hadron or
heavy-ion collision."
L10-11: "Due to the small time and length scales of these collisions,
jets are useful as a probe to study these collisions." -> Not clear,
Please rephrase. For example, what is "small time", "length scale"? and 
"these collisions"
L18: "Jets from proton-proton (𝑝+𝑝) collisions …" ->"Jets produced in
proton-proton (𝑝+𝑝) collisions …"
L19: "…a baseline of comparison for jets in heavy-ion collisions…" ->
"…a baseline in heavy-ion collisions…" ; "…, such as p+A." -> "…, such
as p+A collisions."
L20: "…jet quenching is commonly used …" -> "…jet is commonly used…"
(Here jet quenching is a phenomenon, and jet is a probe)
L21: "…in central collisions …" -> "…in central heavy-ion collisions…"
L22: "are interpreted…" -> "is interpreted…"; "with a QGP" -> with QGP;
"and are…" -> "and is…"
L25:"…too small for the formation of a QGP" -> "Small" of what? Not
clear why QGP is not expected to form in p+A. Please rephrase in terms
of initial energy density, etc.
L26: "…𝑝T < 2 GeV/𝑐" -> "…transever momentum pT < 2 GeV/c"
L27:"Because centrality is not as easily defined…" -> "As the centrality
is not well-defined…"
L28-30: Can you please rephrase this sentence.

L33: "… taken during RHIC Run 15." -> "… taken in 2015."
L35:"The BEMC is composed of towers with 0.2 ≤ 𝐸T ≤ 30.0 GeV" -> Not
clear. we use BEMC towers with this et range, but there are towers
greater than 30 GeV, Is not that? Please rephrase.
L36." …charged tracks…" -> "…the charged tracks…"
L44: "This study uses R=0.4…" -> "This study uses the jet resolution
parameter R=0.4…"
L45: Need to introduce "eta_lead" and "p_{T, lead}^{reco}"

Fig.1 Caption: "Charged underlying event multiplicity…" ->" The
underlying event charged multiplicity…in the hight-EA…";
"..on pT,lead^reco" -> "on the pT,lead^{reco}"

L47: Need to mention "phi_lead" , "phi_trig"
L48: "…in a ∼ 64◦ region …" - >" in azimuth ∼ 64◦ region …"

L50: "The charged UE particle multiplicity …" -> "The UE charged
particle multiplicity …"
L51: Fig. 1 -> remove gap (same for other places)
L52: UE -> the UE
L55: need to introduce EA_BBC (and also EA_TPC below)
L61: "the jet substructure observable mass …" -> "      the jet mass
observable
L65: "This study in p+Au collisions at 𝑠NN = 200 GeV…"
L68: "… and the hard scattering of the jet early in the collision. " ->
Not clear, please rephrase/

Cheers
Nihar




On 2022-11-19 04:07, Veronica Verkest via Star-hp-l wrote:
> Hi all,
>
> I have made some changes to my ICHEP proceedings and uploaded them to
> Drupal (https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/61702). Since the
> deadline is Monday, I would appreciate any comments/feedback.
>
> Thanks,
> Veronica
>
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