STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Youqi,

Please fine my comments below on your nice abstract.
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/DIS_abstract_112122.pdf

L2-3: "..IN √s = 200 GEV pp COLLISIONS" -> "… IN pp collisions at √s = 
200 GEV BY STAR"
L13: "…and requires binning." -> "… and requires their binning."
L18: "…the first time to hadronic collision data." -> "…the first time 
to hadronic collision data at RHIC"
L19: "…pp collisions…" -> "… in pp collisions…"
L20: "…the 2012 RHIC run period." -> "… the year 2012." (Here "RHIC run 
period" is not required.)
L22-23: "After fully correcting six jet substructure observables…" ->  
""After fully correcting six jet substructure observables such as…" It 
would be good to mention what are those six substructure observables?
L24-25: "…present a selection of particle-level observables and their 
correlations, with comparisons to Monte Carlo event generators."
  Not clear. Can you rephrase this sentence? Do you mean "fully 
corrected observables" ?  "and their correlation" -> do you mean the 
correlation among all these observables?

Cheers
Nihar


On 2022-11-25 20:55, Youqi Song wrote:
> Hi Nihar,
>
> This is the version that I would like to submit
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/DIS_abstract_112122.pdf
>
> Best,
> Youqi
>
> On Fri, Nov 25, 2022 at 10:10 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> > Hello Youqi,
> >
> > I can see two abstracts uploaded.
> > Can you please confirm which one you want to submit? Or something I
> > missed here?
> >
> > Regards
> > Nihar
> >
> > On 2022-11-17 00:12, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
> > > Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> > >
> > > Youqi Song (youqi.song AT yale.edu) has submitted a material for a
> > review,
> > > please have a look:
> > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/61672
> > >
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