STAR HardProbes PWG

["Mooney, Isaac" <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>]

Hi conveners,

Thanks for your comments. I’ve implemented most of them in v3 now on the node. Please see my responses to some comments in-line below.

Thanks again,

Isaac

On Nov 29, 2022, at 8:55 PM, Sooraj Radhakrishnan via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Issac,

   Thanks for preparing this nice abstract. Please find a few comments from me below

Title: Measurement of (path length dependent?) nuclear ...by STAR

L7: plasma (QGP)

L7: other abstracts are using A+A and p+p, could change to that

L10: with QGP

L11 scaled (by the number of binary nucleon-nucleon collisions)

L13: high statistics isobar data

L14: Zr+Zr and Ru+Ru

L17: differentially with system size - what do you mean here? The Npart dependence? That you can do in Au+Au too. Better to be clear what is meant

L18: will present results using event shape engineering which can be used to control the path length of the partons through the medium

>> I prefer the structure that was there before. Partly this is because it moderates the expectation for a completely polished ESE measurement to be presented.

L21: traveled --> traversed

>> In the context of this sentence, I think it should be traveled, since traversed shouldn’t have a preposition afterward, and “event plane direction” requires a preposition. E.g. “along” the event plane direction. But I’m no grammar expert.

L21: event plane direction

L22: traversed perpendicular to it

>> See comment about line 21.

L25: geometry of the system --> path length through the QGP

>> I’ve left it at the more vague “geometry of the system” since I’m trying to avoid using too much of the same language as Tristan’s abstract. I know I use “path length of the partons through the medium” one other time out of necessity, but I’d prefer to leave it at that.

thanks

Sooraj

On Tue, Nov 29, 2022 at 3:27 PM Yi Yang via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Isaac,

Thanks a lot for the nice abstract. I have some minor comments for your consideration. 

  - Title: I would suggest to change it from "Nuclear modification" to "Nuclear modification factor for inclusive hadron"  

  - L21: jets which --> sprays of hadrons (jets) which  

Cheers,

Yi  

 

  

 

On Sun, Nov 27, 2022 at 5:50 PM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Isaac,

this event shape dependent jet RAA measurement in Isobar would be indeed
interesting and can draw attention in HP2023.
If you have any update or first result in this direction, please bring
that to upcoming HP-pwg for discussion as soon as possible.

Please find my comment on your nice abstract.

Title: "Nuclear modification …" of what? Please mention either "jet"
or/and "inclusive charged hadron" pT spectra, etc.
L8: "The  modification of the resulting partons with high transverse
momentum (pT) …" -> "The  modification of the parton shower with a high
virtuality in heavy-ion collisions compared to its vacuum…"
("Modification" occurs to jet or jet shape or parton shower. )

L15: "to study system size dependence " -> "    to study the system size
dependence ";
      " of nuclear modification. " -> Here it is not clear "Nuclear
modification of " what? Is this for Jet or inclusive hadron pt, etc?

L20-25: These sentences can be concisely written into one/two sentences.
Please try to rephrase that.

>> I’m not sure what you mean here, since there are already two sentences. I think it reads okay, but maybe I’m missing something.

On the other hand, please include  information how we plan to select
jet, and some analysis information like jet R, kinematic range of jet
pT, etc.

>> I think since we’re not planning to emphasize a push to some previously not explored jet R or pT range, that it is okay not to mention these selection criteria, which I think are a bit too detailed for the abstract and may make it too long.

These are missing in this abstract to make it attractive for HP2023.

Cheers
Nihar





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Department of Physics

Kent State University

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Nuclear Science Division
Lawrence Berkeley National Lab
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