STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Gabe,

Thank you for addressing my comments.
I have an additional comment below. with this implemented, I sign off.

L14-15: ...jet radius, jet pT , and jet constituent ... -> ... jet 
radius, pt, and constituent ...

Cheers
Nihar


On 2023-04-21 01:22, Gabe Dale-Gau wrote:
> Hello Nihar,
>
> Thank you for your nice comments. I have implemented changes to the
> drupal page. Please find my responses below.
>
> Best,
>
> Gabe
>
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/Quark-Matter-2023/Measurements-Baryon-Meson-Ratios-Jets-AuAu-and-pp-Collisions-sqrtsNN
>
> Ratios in Jets -> Ratios inside Jets
>
> done
>
> By STAR -> at STAR
>
> done
>
> L3: …to p+p baseline. -> … to their p+p baseline.
>
> I would prefer to keep this as is if possible. I worry that the
> possessive phrasing “their” implies a stronger connection between
> AuAu and pp than actually exists. I assume this comment is meant to
> highlight the corresponding energy between the two sets so maybe I
> would propose “to the corresponding p+p baseline” if you believe
> it must be changed. However, I think as it stands the context provides
> this information.
>
> L6: …properties, with substantial modifications to jet ->
> …properties
> with substantial modifications to jet
>
> done
>
> L7:medium-induced changes to ->                 medium-induced
> modification to
>
> done
>
> L8:LHC results indicate -> the LHC results indicate
>
> done
>
> L10:through time of flight  ->          through the time of flight
>
> I would prefer to keep this sentence as is, given that I list two
> different types of information. I think the word “the” would
> interrupt the flow here and confuse the meaning.
>
> L12:for p_{T} -> for the transverse momentum p_{T}
>
> I introduced the shorthand p_{T} on line 2. Is it necessary to write
> it out in full every time?
>
> L15: to search for  possible impacts of jet-medium interactions. ->
> to
> investigate on the impacts of jet-medium interactions.
>
> done
>
> On Thu, Apr 20, 2023 at 8:17 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> > Hello Gabe,
> >
> > Please find my comments on your nice abstract.
> >
> > Title:
> > Ratios in Jets -> Ratios inside Jets
> > By STAR -> at STAR
> >
> > L3: …to p+p baseline. -> … to their p+p baseline.
> > L6: …properties, with substantial modifications to jet ->
> > …properties
> > with substantial modifications to jet
> > L7:medium-induced changes to ->                 medium-induced
> > modification to
> > L8:LHC results indicate -> the LHC results indicate
> > L10:through time of flight  ->          through the time of flight
> > L12:for p_{T} -> for the transverse momentum p_{T}
> > L15: to search for  possible impacts of jet-medium interactions. ->
> > to
> > investigate on the impacts of jet-medium interactions.
> >
> > Cheers
> > Nihar
> >
> > On 2023-04-18 22:49, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
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