STAR HardProbes PWG

["Mooney, Isaac" <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>]

Hi Katarzyna and Daniel,

The poster looks good. I have some comments, mostly typos, for your consideration below. And I sign off.

Thanks,

Isaac

In general the poster is pretty text-heavy. Please try to trim some (I think there's a lot that can be made more compact in the "Azimuthal correlations" section without throwing out any information), so you can make the figures a bit bigger. The labels on some of the plots (e.g. x-axis on the raw azimuthal correlations) are not visible from a reasonable distance. And I know you have some motivation in your abstract, but I think it would be great to add a figure like the one on slide 2 here: https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/D0-D0bar-update-HP-PWG-meeting-01.06.2023.pdf since it cleanly illustrates things. But maybe it won't be possible to fit it.

Event selection: consistent (lowercase) 'z', please. Either "v_{r}" or make "transverse" roman.

"Number of events"

Remove "the" in the last bullet of the Data selection" section.

"Invariant mass of D^{0} mesons"

"side-band method"

"We present the azimuthal correlation analysis for data collected by the STAR experiment in..." is redundant given the first bullet of the "Data selection" section. It can be removed.

"We prepared the azimuthal correlations"

"based on the work done by the Berkley group" -> "following Ref. [1]"

"background and foreground"

Remove "used by us"

"signal region to sum of the integrals"

You can remove the titles on the top of the plots since you have the four exterior labels.

"recived with" -> "using the"

"With available statistics”

On Aug 29, 2023, at 1:46 AM, Yi Yang via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Dear Katarzyna and Daniel,

 

Thanks a lot for the nice poster. I have some minor comments for your consideration. 

 - General: 

     - Please add the DOE logo in the poster and put "Supported in part by:" on the top, also if possible please add the conference logo on. 

     - I see it is already quite packed, but it would be nice to add a part of the STAR detector. 

     - You don't need to write a complete sentence in a poster, so you can save some space. 

 - Data selection: 

     - It is not easy to read, all the words are too close to each other, try to rearrange it? 

 - Azimuthal correlations:  

     - I would replace "We present ...Berley group [1]" with two bullets:  (1) Data from 2014 and 2016 Au+Au collisions. (2) Based on the previous work [1]. 

     - You should decrease your number of words and enlarge the plots. 

 - Conclusions: 

     - Will you add the comments on the possibility of seeing the correlation using 2017 + 2022 data? 

Cheers,

Yi

 

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