STAR HardProbes PWG

[zli1 <zli1 AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hi Yi,

Thanks for your nice comments, I upload a new version.

>  - General: you should remove the "period" if it is not in a complete
> sentence, for example two bullets in p3 (Evidence of coherent photon
> interactions in hadronic heavy-ion collisions).  Actually, I think you
> can remove all the "periods" in the presentation, but it is up to you.

Done, you are right, I removed all the periods.

>  - L9: align (~5 interaction length) to the bullets

Done
>  - L22: di-muon --> dimuon  (to be consistent with others)

Done

Best,
Ziyang

On 2023-12-08 18:38, Yi Yang wrote:
> Hi Ziyang,
>
> I almost missed this email, thanks a lot for the reminder.
> The slides look very good to me, so I only have three very minor
> comments for your consideration.
>  - General: you should remove the "period" if it is not in a complete
> sentence, for example two bullets in p3 (Evidence of coherent photon
> interactions in hadronic heavy-ion collisions).  Actually, I think you
> can remove all the "periods" in the presentation, but it is up to you.
>
>  - L9: align (~5 interaction length) to the bullets
>  - L22: di-muon --> dimuon  (to be consistent with others)
>
> Cheers,
> Yi
>
> On Fri, Dec 8, 2023 at 2:14 AM zli1 via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> > Dear Conveners,
> >
> > Thank Zaochen for his reminder, since the abstract has been approved
> > by
> > the HP PWG, it follows that the talk should also be approved by HP,
> > so I
> > re-upload my slides to HP PWG. I apologize for this oversight on my
> > part.
> >
> > Looking forward to your comments and suggestions.
> >
> > Best regards,
> > Ziyang
> >
> > On 2023-12-07 13:08, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
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> > >
> > > Ziyang Li (lzy9404 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn) has submitted a material for
> > a
> > > review,
> > > please have a look:
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