STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Mate Csanad <csanad AT bnl.gov>]

Dear Zhi,

Thanks for the nice poster. If I understand well, now it is my turn (as an 
assigned reviewer) to check and comment on it. Please find a few suggestions (or 
questions) below:

Slide 1
- extends -> extents
- from the -> from (although I am also not a native speaker)
- for the pairs of p-Lambda and p-Xi- -> for p-Lambda and p-Xi- pairs
- extend -> extent

Slide 2
- you could probably expand "YN" to "hyperon-nucleon (YN)"
- Spatio-temporal -> spatio-temporal
- 3GeV -> 3 GeV
- what is the difference between 3-momenta p_a and p_a^*? or is the '*' a 
misprint there?
- what frame is the absolute value in the definition of k^* taken? should be 
mentioned explicitely (probably pair comoving frame?)
- the equation after "Given by" is a bit too compressed; I would separate it 
into
 C(k^*)=...(the integral)...
and
 C(k^*->0)=1
as it is probably more clear this way

Slide 3
- of TPC -> of the TPC
- 0.25mm ->0.25 mm

Slide 4
- I would have the text before the plots and the equations, as those are not 
understandable without it, and people tend to read from top to bottom
- These purity plots are based on the mentioned simulation, right? If so, it 
would be good to write this on the plots, to avoid any misuderstanding.
- On the contrary, the lambda plots are real measurements? If so, STAR 
preliminary (?) and all other details should  be given on them.
- Would it be possible to define the side-band region on the slide, or at least 
mention something about it?
- What is the connection between the two C(k*) formulas? Does the sideband part 
correspond to the i-j sum directly? Would be nice to clarify just a little bit more.

Slide 5
- Probably \vec{k^*} is really just k^*, without the vector sign, right?
- Can you add a bit more space before S_{4\pi}, just to separate the two 
equations better?
- The "Makes it ..." line could be split (broken) at a better point, such as 
before "e.g.". Or it could be shortened to fit one line:
"Possible to test model calculations: e.g. strong potential by HAL QCD 
collab."
- Linebreak in the "2B Au+Au ..." line could also be put at a more logical 
point, e.g., before "expected"

Thanks, best regards,
Mate

2022. 04. 02. 14:21 keltezéssel, Q Z via Star-cf-l írta:
> Dear Xiaofeng,
>
> Thank you very much for the comments and signing off.
> We update the slide on the same link
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/59019 
> <https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/59019>
>
>
> Best,
> Zhi
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> *发送时间:* 2022年4月2日 10:59
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> *主题:* Re: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Zhi Qin for Quark Matter 2022 
> submitted for review
> Hi Zhi and Yingjie,
>
>      Nice poster, please find my minor comments below :
>      1. Slide 1, Please put ONLY ONE name there for the STAR collaboration.
>      2. Slide 2, In the 3rd bullet of the motivation : "An attractive
> p-Xi interaction is observed in p-Pb and pp collisions at ALICE "
>         Please change to "An attractive p-Xi interaction has been
> observed in Au+Au 200 GeV at STAR, p-Pb and pp collisions at ALICE "
>         Since previously, STAR has reported p-Xi results at 200 GeV and
> claim the observation of the attractive interaction in p and Xi.
>
>      With this implemented, I sign off.
>
> Thank you,
> Best Regards,
> Xiaofeng
>
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