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Dear star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,

Hanna Zbroszczyk ( hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl ) has commented on a material  
originally submitted by Zachary Sweger ( zwsweger AT ucdavis.edu ) at
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/Rencontres-de-Moriond/Recent-Results-and-Future-Prospects-STAR-Beam-Energy-Scan-Prog-0

Comment:
Dear Zachary,
please find my comments below on your nice proceedings. I am not sure whether 
 
you should put your photo.  I don't insist on removing it, but please  
reconsider if you really want to have it.
Introduction, 1st page, 4th line from the bottom: mentioning collision  
energies, do not forget to add \sqrt{s_{NN}}.
Figure 1: please increase.
Section 2, add a reference to HBT parametrization: BP (out-side-long).
A peak in R_out/R_side .. is predicted. -> can be predicted.
Section 3: define LMR, IMR (extend abbreviations)
Section 4: second paragraph from 7.7 .. -> from \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 7.7. ..
and later: in 3.0 GeV -> in \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 3.0 GeV.

With those and Toshihiro's comments, I sign off.
Thanks,
Hanna


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