STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

["Keane, Declan" <keane AT kent.edu>]

Hi Zach,

The new version looks great.  My only follow-up comment is that if you ask 
anyone in our field what "top energy" means at RHIC, they will always think 
200 GeV.  So maybe  Top energy --> Top FXT energy

    Have a good meeting,
    Declan

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From: Zachary Sweger <zwsweger AT ucdavis.edu>
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To: STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG; Keane, Declan
Subject: Re: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Zachary Sweger for Quark Matter 
2023 submitted for review

Hi Declan,

Thank you for your comments! I've incorporated them and the updated poster 
can be found here: 
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/Zach_Poster_QM_v2.pdf<https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://nam11.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https*3A*2F*2Fdrupal.star.bnl.gov*2FSTAR*2Fsystem*2Ffiles*2FZach_Poster_QM_v2.pdf&data=05*7C01*7Ckeane*40kent.edu*7C5bc8ca488cbb4b29508208dba80cb3f8*7Ce5a06f4a1ec44d018f73e7dd15f26134*7C1*7C0*7C638288544908781148*7CUnknown*7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJWIjoiMC4wLjAwMDAiLCJQIjoiV2luMzIiLCJBTiI6Ik1haWwiLCJXVCI6Mn0*3D*7C3000*7C*7C*7C&sdata=VNdJVVrrLPBrrK4889oG6O2xJQ*2Bt734Vw*2Fjwc*2F2CpnA*3D&reserved=0__;JSUlJSUlJSUlJSUlJSUlJSUlJSUlJSUlJSU!!P4SdNyxKAPE!FK8uGEnfIqwk91exOpcuI3Paj_cPDVsvakaCLFUSmfq2dH--astRSascojW83T8FYOnmbVZZptW5lGTeZbYcYg$
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A couple of comments:

  *   About your question about the figure in box 4: "Truth" refers to the 
true (no pileup) distribution of protons. I've updated the legend to clarify 
this.
  *   About your comment on box 3, third bullet: I'd prefer to keep the 
language referring to "top energy analyses" because we may do a midrapidity 
comparison of 5.2 GeV but compare the result to UrQMD with acceptance gaps. 
There is leeway to analyze what we can in that mid-energy range, so we can't 
specify exactly right now at what energy we "can't" do a midrapidity analysis.


Thank you!
Zach


On Sat, Aug 26, 2023 at 4:57 AM Keane, Declan via Star-cf-l 
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Hi Zach,

STAR Management has asked me to take a look at a few posters, including 
yours.  This is an impressive poster and your eventual result will be very 
important and exciting. A few minor suggestions:

Box 1.:
It would be preferable if your 3rd bullet had a similar verbal style as the 
others.  What about something like “Cumulants of net-proton number 
distributions vs. beam energy are a promising observable”

Box 2.:
RHIC collides Au+Au down to 7.7 GeV --> RHIC luminosity in collider mode is 
unusable below 7.7 GeV

Box 3.:
1st bullet:  --> …shown by red box
3rd bullet:  Top energy analyses --> Fixed-target analyses above 4.5(?) GeV
Last bullet:  validate --> increase confidence in

I can understand why you make the middle panel at the bottom bigger, but 
consider a partial increase in size of the two outer panels.

Box 4.:
Why is “Truth” written in the legend box of the panel on the left?

Box 5.:
Conclusions --> Outlook  [since your results are still pending]
3rd bullet:  validation --> cross-check

References:
Page number is missing from all references.
Issue no. is not needed and is usually not given.
Usual convention is to list volume number in bold (and not write “vol.”)

   Best regards,
   Declan


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Date: Saturday, August 26, 2023 at 2:40 AM
To: STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG 
<star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov<mailto:star-cf-l AT lists.bnl.gov>>, Hanna Paulina 
Zbroszczyk <hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl<mailto:hanna.zbroszczyk AT pw.edu.pl>>, 
Toshihiro Nonaka 
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Subject: EXT: Re: [Star-cf-l] STAR presentation by Zachary Sweger for Quark 
Matter 2023 submitted for review

Dear Hanna and Toshihiro,

Thank you both for your comments. I've incorporated them into the poster and 
the new version can be found here: 
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One note: Hanna's second comment was about adjusting the wording on the same 
line that Toshihiro commented on, so I used Hanna's phrasing. I hope this is 
okay.

Thank you!
Zach

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Dear Zach,

Please find my minor comments on your nice poster.

Add somewhere a logo of DoE and add the statement  „Partially funded by..”

Part 2:
(RHIC) can only collide -> collides

With those implemented, I sign off.

Enjoy the conference!

Thanks,
Hanna


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Dear Zach,

I have some comments on your nice poster presentation.

With these implemented, I sign off.

Best regards,
Toshihiro

1. Introduction
(Critical Fluctuations)
- 1st bullet: Fluctuations of conserved charges
- 4th bullet: Cite Misha’s paper here?

(Cumulants and Moments)
- Cite [1] here?

(Previous Results)
- 2nd bullet: Add [2] at the end of the sentence
- 3rd and 4th bullets: Insert space after “=”.

2. The STAR Fixed-Target Program
- 1st bullet: … cannot operate at Au+Au collisions below 7.7 GeV.
- 3rd bullet: New data from \sqrt{s_NN} = 3.0 - 7.7 GeV

(Challenges)
- 2nd bullet: higher energies, instead of highest energy?
- 3rd bullet: ID -> identification

3. Acceptance
(Top figures) Inside each panel, \sqrt{s_{NN}} = X GeV
(Right bullets)
- 1st bullet: Standard analysis window (write down rapidity and pT acceptance 
here) shown in…
- 2nd bullet: Insert space after “=”
(Overlap at 7.7 GeV): Insert space after “=”
- 1st bullet: Insert space after “=”
- Middle panel: \sqrt{s_{NN}} = 7.7 GeV

References
[2] (20 2022) -> (2022)
Remove “In” and “p.”




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