STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG

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Dear CWR,

Thanks for incorporating my suggestions. I sign off.

Thanks and regards,
Subhash

On 2022-10-23 08:48 PM, Robertson, Charles William wrote:
> Hello Subhash,
>
>  Thank you for your comments and suggestions.
>
>  I have updated the slides
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/Dnp_Slides_5_0.pdf
>
>  -CW
>
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>
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> To: Robertson, Charles William <rober558 AT purdue.edu>; STAR Flow,
> Chirality and Vorticity PWG <star-fcv-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> Cc: Prithwish Tribedy <ptribedy AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>
> Subject: Re: [Star-fcv-l] STAR presentation by Charles Robertson for
> DNP 2022 submitted for review
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> Dear CWR,
>
> Nice slides. I have a few suggestions for your consideration:
>
> General:
> Usually, we have "On behalf of STAR collaboration" for a STAR regular
> stalk. Please replace your group's name with this.
>
> All the physics figures should have collision system with beam energy
> and "STAR Preliminary" labels inside it.
>
> N*Delta_gamma --> N \times Delta_gamma
>
> s#2: 4th bullet: see --> observe
>
> s#2&3: You start with CME, which is well known within our community.
> But
> for a wider audience at some place you could introduce Chiral Magnetic
> Effect (CME).
> you could also add reference to CME papers.
>
> s#5 onwards: I think \xi should not be labelled as "STAR data" and
> "Our
> preference". IMO, both results are from STAR but using two different
> approaches. Please rephrase it accordingly.
>
> s#6: introduces --> can introduce
> Not present --> Not expected
> make --> can make
> If possible, could you add math expressions correspond to Ave/Sep
> Delta_S Single/Two Norms. To me, it is not evident from the slides
> what
> they correspond to.
>
> Legend "STAR isobar" --> STAR PRC.XX.xxxx (same suggestion in all
> relevant figures)
> because all of them are STAR data from isobar collisions.
>
> Please unify style of references, e.g. 5 and 6 has different styles
> for
> referencing.
>
> s#7: Can you label what the solid lines mean, inside the figures.
> I believe you fit the data and then extrapolate to zero. If yes, can
> you
> make extrapolation as dashed lines.
> For centrality labels, instead of 2.5, can you label them as 0-5% and
> so
> on ...
> If possible, suggest to increase size of axis titles, they are too
> small
> to be distinguished from axis labels. (same suggestion in all relevant
> figures)
>
> s#8: ESE --> Event Shape Engineering (ESE), then add a reference
>
> s#9: Remove the histogram title in the left figure
> Right bullets: q_2, v_2
>
> s#11: Instead of "We propose ...", how about rephrasing:
> A modified R-observable (\xi) has been developed for CME search. (then
> you put your reference paper in bracket)
>
> Thanks and regards,
> Subhash
>
> On 2022-10-22 08:31 PM, Robertson, Charles William via Star-fcv-l
> wrote:
> > Hello Prithwish,
> >
> >  Thank you for your comments and suggestions.
> >  I have updated the slides.
> >  Thanks for signing off!
> >
> >  https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/Dnp_Slides_4_0.pdf
> >
> >  -CW
> >
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> >
> > From: Star-fcv-l <star-fcv-l-bounces AT lists.bnl.gov> on behalf of
> > Prithwish Tribedy via Star-fcv-l <star-fcv-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> > Sent: Saturday, October 22, 2022 9:59 AM
> > To: STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG
> <star-fcv-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> > Subject: Re: [Star-fcv-l] STAR presentation by Charles Robertson for
> > DNP 2022 submitted for review
> >
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> > Dear CWR,
> >   Nice slides. Here are my comments. With these included I sign off
> > your
> > talk.
> >
> > slide#1: I guess you are going to change the date of "Oct 5,2022".
> Add
> > "Supported in part by" above the DOE logo.
> >
> > slide#3: "B field and J aligned" --> "B field and J are aligned"
> >
> > slide#3: "second order reaction plane" --> "reaction plane"
> >
> > slide#3: "Phenomenologically" is not the correct choice here. How
> > about
> > "The azimuthal distribution of produced particles"
> >
> > slide#4: "normalizing for multiplicit" --> "normalizing with
> > multiplicity" (I guess)
> >
> > slide#5: Above the two equations write something like "Two different
> > ways of normalization"
> >
> > slide#6: In this figure and the others change "Errors are
> statistical"
> > --> "Statistical uncertainties only"
> >
> > slide#6: \xi is not defined anywhere. Please clearly define it on
> this
> > slide and I suggest you quote the expression on other slides as
> well.
> > slide#6: "Average \Delta S" --> "Averaging \Delta S between two
> > sub-event", "autocorrelation, This is" --> "autocorrelation that is"
> >
> > Below the two sub-bullets you have to remind again that in your new
> > approach the \Delta S in two sub-events are treated separately.
> >
> > slide#7: Add a statement, something like "Separate \Delta S and
> > different treatments of normalization affect the correlation between
> > \Xi
> > and N\Delta\gamma". It would also be good to say that it motivates
> > your
> > ESE analysis.
> >
> > slide#9: Specify the kinematics for "q_2" estimation.
> >
> > slide#10: Add a conclusion line here on this slide.
> >
> > slide#11: I think you should add a general line on the top like "We
> > propose modifications to the R-observable developed for CME search"
> >
> > slide#11: I think "In previous analysis" before "STAR data" would
> > help.
> >
> > slide#11: Add "redefined width of the R-observable" or something
> like
> > that after \Xi.
> >
> > Best,
> > Prithwish
> >
> > On 2022-10-13 10:48, webmaster--- via Star-fcv-l wrote:
> > > Dear star-fcv-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> > >
> > > Charles Robertson (rober558 AT purdue.edu) has submitted a material
> for
> > a
> > > review, please have a look:
> > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/61312
> > >
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