STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Monika,

Please find my comments on your nice proceedings.

ABstract line10: "	…can serve as an experimental…" -> "… serve as an 
experimental…"
"enable exploration of " -> "enable the exploration of "
"…between zg and Rg at …" -> "… between the zg and Rg at…"
"…second and third splits…" -> "…second, and third splits…"
"soft wide"->"soft-wide" (and elsewhere)

L12: "…in the high enegy collisions …" -> "in high energy collisions" ; 
"showering " -> "parton showering"
L13 " These collimated sprays …" -> Not clear "these". Rephrase this and 
previous sentence to make it smooth.
L15: "Jet substructure describe …" -> "Jet substructure describes…"
L15-18: "Jet substructure…SoftDotp[]" -> A long sentence. Can you slit 
this sentence?
L22: "…called shared momentum …" -> "… called the shared momentum…"
L24:"…the first split and evolution" ->"…the first split, and the 
evolution …"
L25:" ..the first, second and third…" ->"… the first, second, and third 
…" (elsewhere)

L26: "Correletion between observables at the first split" -> 
"Correlation between z_{g} and R_g"
L30: "…correct data…" -> "…correct the data…" ; "…to obtain true…" -> 
"…to obtain the true.."
L33: "using 2D Iterative Bayesian" -> "using the 2D Iterative Bayesian…
L57: "…more harder and collinear…" -> "… more harder and collinear…"
L60: "We presented first fully…" -> We presented the first fully  (you 
may drop this word "first"; a cliché)
L63-64: "We can disentangle …	(hadronization) QCD processes. " -> Drop 
this sentence, not needed. It just popes up in the conclusion section, 
no discussion found in the text before.
L67: "We would like to also compare our data with Monte Carlo 
 simulations. " -> this is not needed here. You can drop it.

Cheers
Nihar


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