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[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Tanmay.

Please find my additional comments.
with these implemented I sign off.

Title does not sound good.
Please use the following
> > Measurement of jet modifications of momentum profile and generalized
> > angularities in Au+Au collisions at √sNN = 200 GeV at STAR

L13:"... will inform our understanding of..." please rephrase it.

Cheers
Nihar







On 2023-04-21 22:10, Tanmay Pani wrote:
> Hi Nihar,
>
> Thank you for the comments, I have implemented them and updated
> version is here: Tanmay_Pani_QM23_v2.pdf [1]
>
> Regarding the groomed-jet stuff, sorry that I forgot to add it in my
> discussion yesterday, I added it at the last moment as an extra
> measurement that I would like to do once I have my finalized jets from
> AuAu, as I already have macros for grooming in my framework. I can
> talk more about it after a few internal discussions in next, or
> next-to-next week's meeting.
>
> Thanks,
>
> Tanmay
>
> On Fri, Apr 21, 2023 at 6:31 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> > Hello Tanmay,
> >
> > Please find my comments on your nice abstract.
> >
> > Title : How about?
> > Measurement of jet modifications of momentum profile and generalized
> >
> > angularities in Au+Au collisions at √sNN = 200 GeV at STAR
> > L1-4: You can concise it. for QM conf, everyone knows jet-quenching
> > and
> > QGP.
> > L4-6:   this sentence needs work. Can you please try again?
> > L11: in presence of medium …in LHC -> in presence of the medium
> > … at the
> > LHC.
> > L11-15: thess sentences need some work.
> > L16-17: "       we present the first, fully corrected for
> > detector-smearing,
> > measurements of …" -> "…we present the first measurment of fully
> >
> > corrected       ρ(r), g, pDT and LeSub observables …"
> > L19-20: using a p + p collision baseline.  -> relative to p+p
> > collisions
> > baseline.
> > L20-21: "The effect of soft-radiation has been probed by comparing
> > with
> > calculations  using SoftDrop groomed jets. " is that true? We have
> > not
> > discussed this in your QM2023 status presentation yesterday. Have I
> > missed here?
> > L21-22:         "The observations have been compared with
> > state-of-art  Monte
> > Carlo simulations and calculations. " -> "Finally, the data are
> > compared
> > with the Monte Carlo models and the implications are discussed. "
> >
> > Cheers
> > Nihar
> >
> > On 2023-04-19 19:23, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
> > > Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> > >
> > > Tanmay Pani (tp543 AT physics.rutgers.edu) has submitted a material
> > for a
> > > review, please have a look:
> > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/63483
> > >
> > > Deadline: 2023-05-01
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