STAR HardProbes PWG

[Andrew Tamis <andrew.tamis AT yale.edu>]

Hello Nihar,

Thank you for the nice comments, I have uploaded a new version implementing them.  For Figure 1 I was using updated pdfs where the only change was the caption "Kyle Lee, MIT" -> "Lee et al." but I forgot to include the labels for the regions in these versions, which I have now added.  I've kept the updated label for the theory curve, let me know if this is ok.  For Figure 2, as you recommended I added an interpretation that the overall correction needed is small but the difference is most prominent in the very low and very high delta R regions, so i've updated the plot to be log scale on y axis to show this better as well.

L16-17: "where the partons begin to behave non-perturbatively" -> "where non-perturbative effects begin to dominate as partons are confined into hadrons"

L54: "As this observable is expected to exhibit interesting behaviors due
to" -> "As this observable is sensitive to selections on "

L111: I changed this line to "perturbative behavior"

Best,

Andrew

On Fri, Jul 7, 2023 at 5:35 AM Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Andrew,

Thank you for your nice proceedings.
Please find my comments below.

Firstly, I am not sure if we should call it "fully corrected
measurement". Because L76-77 mentioned that we have not corrected "the
ΔR and energy weight ".  What do you think?

Title: … 200GeV -> 200 GeV
L1:Andrew Tamis ->Andrew Tamis (for the STAR Collaboration)

Abstract:
The EEC can cleanly reveal… -> The EEC can reveal…
$ p_{T,jet}$ -> $p_{\rm T,jet}$ [all places like L49,53, in Eq1}

The EEC will be shown for several full… -> The EEC is shown for several
full…
This work will be useful… -> This study is useful …
…in heavy-ion systems,… ->…, in heavy-ion collisions, …
L15: …perturbative effects -> … perturbative quantum chromodynamics
(QCD) effects.
L16-17: "…where the partons begin to behave non-perturbatively …" -> Not
sure where do you get this statement. Can you give some references? This
transition from color to colorless object in QCD is completely unknown.
It is probably incorrect to say "parton begins to behave
non-perturbatively".  Please rephrase this.
L19 heavy ion -> heavy-ion [all places]
L24:    This will cleanly separate … -> This observable separates … [ Still
ambiguity is there in separating these two regimes]
L27:     …quark/gluon shower … -> …parton shower
L31: $p_{T}$ -> $p_{\rm T}$
L33: using data -> using the data
L33: √s=200GeV -> √s = 200 GeV
L34: Experiment -> experiment
L35: Neutral energy deposits were determined -> Neutral energy deposits
are determined [make tense consistent]
L37:    Jets in this dataset were found … ->    Jets are reconstructed…
L38: R = 0.4 and R = 0.6 -> R = 0.4 and 0.6
L43: in conjunction -> together ; deposits -> deposited ; were -> are
L46: in equation 1 -> in Eq. 1
L47:    between two particle pairs -> between the two particle pairs
L48:  …particle pairs, differential in their distance from each other ΔR
->      …particle pairs and the differential in their angular distance.

L49: energy weight, (…) in … -> energy weight, (…), in...

Fig.1->  x-axis, y-axis title, labels are so small. Please increase the
size.
Caption:  p_T^det -> $p_{\rm T}^{\rm det}$,  p_T^part -> $p_{\rm T}^{\rm
part}$; correlations matched between the two simulation samples  ->
correlations between the matched jets of these two simulation samples ;
PYTHIA6 -> PYTHIA-6 or PYTHIA 6 (same for all other places)
_ No comment on  Fig.1 left plot. If Pythia6+geant reproduces the
Pythia6 or not in the texts .

Fig.2: Use the same plots those were used in HP2023. For example, in
your HP2023 presentation, there were texts like "Free hadron",
"transition", "Quank/gluon" but these are not in proceedings

L54:    As this observable is expected to exhibit interesting behaviors due
to  -> rephrase this sentence especially "interesting"

L57:    at particle(truth) level and at detector level. -> at the particle
(truth) level and detector level.
L60 -> if they are within … -> if their jet axies are within their jet
radius.
L88->           the jet cone the distribution ->                the jet cone, the
distribution
L92: Lambda_QCD -> $\Lambda_{\rm QCD}$
L95: Figure 2 -> Fig. 2 [similarly in L101 for Figure 3]
L96: R_turnover -> R_{\rm turn over} ; similarly jet-low -> _{\rm
jet-low}
GeV/c [non-italic and use slash ]
L106:heavy-ion environments. -> heavy-ion collisions.
L108: Energy Correlator ->      EEC
L109: … in jets done at RHIC has been presented.  -> … in jets, at RHIC,
are presented. ; remove "cleanly"
L111: perturbative fragmentation of quarks and gluons -> "perturbative
fragmentation" has no meaning;


Cheers
Nihar

On 2023-07-05 18:52, Andrew Tamis wrote:
> Hello Nihar,
>
> Yes, I have updated with line numbers.
>
> best,
> Andrew
>
> On Wed, Jul 5, 2023 at 9:10 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
>> Hello Andrew,
>>
>> Can you please put linenumber in your proceedings?
>> it will help us to comment on it.
>>
>> Thank you
>> Nihar
>>
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