STAR Correlations and Fluctuations PWG

[Debasish Mallick <dmallick AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Dear Nihar Bhai,
Thank you very much for your suggestions.

Please find the updated draft of the proceeding at the following link.
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/60407


Thanks,
With best regards,
Debasish


On 2022-07-27 17:14, Nihar Sahoo via Star-cf-l wrote:
> Hello Debasish,
>
> I was going through your nice proceedings and found something to 
> correct on.
> Please find my suggestions and comment below only on your introduction.
>
> Line18-19:
> "... study the phases of strongly interacting matter under extreme
> conditions such as temperature and/or pressure."
>
> This statement is not correct especially "study the phases of strongly
> interacting matter". you could rephrase like "study the phases of
> matter"; note here that QGP (hot-dense QCD matter, that is strongly
> interacting matter) and hadronic matter are those phases.
>
> Line20: "gives direct opportunity" -> "gives a direct opportunity"
>
> Line21: "...this new state of matter" you did not mention what is that
> new state of matter. For example Quark-Gluon Plasma, etc.
> You need to introduce QGP somewhere in the introduction that you have 
> not.
>
> Line 22:"...within thermal statistical model... " -> "... within the
> thermal statistical model ..."
>
> Line27: "energies is of the " -> "energies are of the ..."; "only few
> MeV," -> "only a few MeV,"
>
> Line30: "close-by " -> "close by"
>
> Line32: "elliptic" -> "the elliptic"
>
> LIne36: " and proton-deuteron are"  Need to mention higher order
> cumulant of proton-deuteron correlations or distribution.
>
> Rest I have not gone through due to my limited time.
>
> Regards,
> Nihar
>
>
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