STAR Flow, Chirality and Vorticity PWG

[Prithwish Tribedy <ptribedy AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Dear ChunJian,
  Very nice slides. Here are my comments. With these included, I sign 
off.

General comment: some of the fonts you have used are too small.

Side#3:
Define "0\nu\beta\beta" somewhere on this slide.
"Rarely experimental measurements" --> "Few experimental measurements" 
or "Rarely explored in experiment"

Slide#4: "based on N_{ch}^{offline} with" --> "based on uncorrected 
tracks (N_{ch}^{offline}) in"

Slide#6: Some texts are overlapping, the page number is hidden.

Minor & optional comment: the references are not written in conventional 
 formats (like Zhang and Jia, PRL 128, 022301 (2022)).

"cancelation" --> "cancellation"

It is not clear what you mean by "cancellation expected in non-central 
collisions". What gets cancelled with what? Also, this is approximately 
true, right ? Then maybe say "approximate cancellation"

The 4th bullet is a bit confusing, right? What do you mean by this? It 
depends on how the size is defined. Larger neutron skin means large 
size, so there's an apparent contradiction between the 3rd and the 4th 
bullets.

Slide#7:
"non-linear" --> "Nonlinear" in title and everywhere
"reflect nuclear structure" --> "reflects difference in nuclear 
structure"
It's impossible to see what you're plotting on the two right figures. At 
least write in bigger fonts that you're plotting "Mean ratio" and "Third 
moment ratio"


Slide#8: "Study nuclear structure" --> "Study of nuclear structure"
"increase in central" --> "increase in central collisions"

It is very difficult to read what is plotted on the

Slide#9: Add "More investigation using STAR data is underway"

It is not clear what your conclusion is from the data-model comparison 
on the right. Can you please add a short sentence.


Slide#10: "identical for Ru and Zr in final state as expected" --> 
"consistent between Ru+Ru and Zr+Zr as expected"
While talking do mention that "as is it driven by final state effects"

"variance and skewness" --> You didn't show skewness, maybe say 
"variance and third order moment"

Add "more studies underway" in the last bullet.

Best,
Pritwish








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