STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Andrew,

Please find my additional comments.

Line#2: In title , "…GeV  in  STAR"  -> looks like there are extra space 
between "GeV__in__STAR", would you please check this?
Line#19: p+p -> $p+p$ (italic)
Line#19-20: "	This talk will present  analysis done with jets 
reconstructed.. " -> "This talk will present a measurement of jets 
reconstructed…"
Line#22: "…approximately …" -> Not sure why it is required to mention 
"approximately" here? Is there any reason?

> 8. I use N-point as it is what the attached reference i used called
> them, I think it may be better to maintain cohesion
Ok, That is fine.

> 10. By Scaling behavior, I mean the expected shape of the curve in
> that region due to theory predictions.  It is the language used in my
> reference, should I do more to introduce it here?  Perhaps I can just
> change it to curve shape.
I was trying to understand this "scaling behavior" from that paper; I 
will read it again later.
At this moment you can just keep it as it is.

Regards,
Nihar

On 2022-06-18 02:37, Andrew Tamis wrote:
> Hello Nihar,
>
> Thank you very much for the feedback!
> 1. Done
> 2. Done
> 3. Done
> 4. Done
> 5. Done
> 6. Done
> 7. Done, and attached reference
>
> 8. I use N-point as it is what the attached reference i used called
> them, I think it may be better to maintain cohesion
> 9. Done
> 10. By Scaling behavior, I mean the expected shape of the curve in
> that region due to theory predictions.  It is the language used in my
> reference, should I do more to introduce it here?  Perhaps I can just
> change it to curve shape.
>
> 11. By the time of the talk, I may not have unfolding ready at a level
> that I am willing to show, but I still believe it is helpful to
> mention that I will show data, and the sentence mentioning "first
> studies" may be vague enough to not overrepresent what I will be
> bringing.  I believe that showing that the detector level data
> exhibits the same behavior to constituent pt cuts as the PYTHIA
> simulations contains useful information.
>
> 12. Done
> 13. Done
> 14. Done
> 15. Done
> 16. Done
> 17. Done
>
> I have made these changes and several others that were suggested.  The
> updated abstract is here
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/presentations/DNP-2022/Correlators-pp-Collisions-Sqrts200GeV-STAR
>
> Thank you,
> Andrew Tamis
>
> On Fri, Jun 17, 2022 at 6:14 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
> > Hello Andrew,
> >
> > Thank you for your plan to perform this new measurement in STAR.
> > Please find my comment and suggestions on your abstract.
> >
> > 1. Title- "Correlators in pp Collisions at √s = 200GeV from STAR"
> > I think title needs more information to convey about "N-particle
> > energy
> > correlator in jet".
> > Something like "Measurement of energy correlators within jet in p+p
> > collisions at √s = 200GeV in STAR"
> > Or "Measurement of 2-particle energy correlators within jet in p+p
> > collisions at √s = 200GeV in STAR"
> > 2. Andrew Tamis -> Andrew Tamis (for the STAR collaboration)
> > 3. "Within high energy collisions, Jets are a unique…"
> > -> "Jet is a unique…hard-scattered quarks and gluons in high
> > energy
> > collision experiment."
> > 4."…in Jet-finding…" -> "… in jet-finding.."
> > 5."..allow for increased study…" -> "…allow for detailed
> > study…"
> > 6."…the quark/gluon shower, fragmentation, and
> > the resulting final hadrons." -> "the quark/gluon shower,
> > fragmentation,
> > and the hadronization in the Quantum-Chromodynamics."
> > 7. "…within jets defines an observable that probes…" -> need to
> > introduce here what is that observable ? For example, "…within
> > jets
> > defines an observable, the N-particle energy correlator in jet, that
> >
> > probes…" ; the introduction of this observable may need reference
> > so
> > please provide reference of previous study.
> > 8. "N-point" ->  "N-particle" would be clearer.
> > 9. "re-contextualize" -> "recontextualize"
> > 10. "By plotting the 2-point energy correlator as a function of
> > opening
> > angle, one can determine the crossover region from where the scaling
> >
> > behavior of the correlator changes from scaling as a random
> > distribution
> > of hadrons at low opening angles, to scaling as quarks and gluons
> > dominated by perturbative interactions at large opening angles." ->
> > Please break this statement and paraphrase it. Not sure what is this
> >
> > "scaling"?
> > 11. Second para, I would prefer to start with "In this talk, the
> > study
> > of 2-point energy correlator in jet will be discussed using PYTHIA
> > and
> > STAR grant simulation using kinematic coverage of the STAR
> > experiment."
> > (Or Something similar to this) So that we will not be saying
> > explicitly
> > to show the results from p+p data at this moment in the abstract.
> > But at
> > the end this abstract, you could mention STAR plan to perform this
> > analysis where you could show some preliminary plots in your talk if
> > you
> > could have by that time. [I think this what we discussed at our last
> >
> > meeting]. Please let me know what do you think.
> > 12. "The correlation functions were approximated.." -> "The
> > correlation
> > functions are approximate…"
> > 13. "…y-φ space…" -> "… rapidity-azimuthal angle phase
> > space…"
> > 14. "…approximated via multiplicity histograms of the opening
> > angle…" ->
> > "…approximated by the distribution of the opening angle…
> > 15. "simulations in PYTHIA" -> "simulation using PYTHIA"
> > 16. "selections on overall" -> "selections on the overall"
> > 17. "pT" -> "transverse momentum ($ p_{\rm T}$)"
> >
> > Regards,
> > Nihar
> >
> > On 2022-06-11 02:10, webmaster--- via Star-hp-l wrote:
> > > Dear Star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov members,
> > >
> > > Andrew Tamis (andrew.tamis AT yale.edu) has submitted a material for
> > a
> > > review,
> > > please have a look:
> > > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/59931
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