STAR HardProbes PWG

["Mooney, Isaac" <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>]

Hi all,

I think this will make a great talk and I’m looking forward to seeing it. Below are some comments (mostly just grammar) on your merged abstract. With these addressed, I sign off.

Best,

Isaac

1. Are heavy-flavor electrons themselves probes? Or the result of decays from open heavy-flavor hadrons which are the probes?

3. "directional asymmetry" was unclear to me. I believe (since you mention it later in the abstract) you're talking about v2, right? Could you just say here either "elliptic flow" as you do later, or "anisotropy"?

8. "at different collision energies and system sizes."

10. "Ru" and "Zr" should be upright, and space on either side of the "+" can be reduced.

11. Remove "data".

19. "...we will present measurements of central-to..."

21. "that are"

22. This last sentence is a bit vague, but I understand the difficulty of combining all of these analyses and making a coherent story for the abstract within a reasonable length. If you can't think of a more concrete sentence (e.g. starting with replacing "studying QGP properties" with something about the strong EM fields and orbital angular momentum of the early medium), I'm okay with it remaining as is.

On Jun 23, 2023, at 10:47 AM, Yi Yang <yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw> wrote:

Dear Dandan and all,

Thanks a lot for the merged abstract. I have some minor comments for your consideration and could you please submit it to the drupal page as before? Thanks. 

 - L1: I would say "Quarkonium and open heavy flavor are important probes to study  ... " 

 - L4: HFE --> heavy-flavor decay electrons (HFE)    (if you agree with the previous comment...)

 - L8:  at different collision energies --> at different collision systems and energies

 - L12: in Beam Energy Scan phase II --> in the  phase II of Beam Energy Scan program

 - L22: I would move this part to L19 right after mentioning J/psi and Upsilon. 

Cheers,

Yi

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On Fri, Jun 23, 2023 at 12:19 PM Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Dandan and PAs,

Thank you for implementing my comments.
It is now in good shape.
I sign off.

Regards
Nihar


On 2023-06-23 06:36, Dandan wrote:
> Hi Nihar,
> 
> Thank you very much! I have uploaded the new version with your nice
> comments implemented.
>  Here is the new version, please find it at:
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/QM_Abstract_ver5.pdf
> 
> Best,
> Dandan
> 
> 发件人：Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>
> 发送日期：2023-06-22 15:47:37
> 收件人：Dandan <shendandan AT mail.sdu.edu.cn>
> 抄送人：YiYang <yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw>,Isaac
> <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>,Wei <wzhang AT m.scnu.edu.cn>,"v.d.prozorova"
> <v.d.prozorova AT gmail.com>,Yan <wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn>,Te-Chuan
> Huang <tchuang AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>,HP <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> 主题：Re: Merging of QM abstracts>Hello Dandan and PAs,
>> 
>> Please find my comments on your nice abstract.
>> 
>> 
>> J/ψ  -> $J/\psi$ all places
>> 
>> L1-2: "Quarkonia and electrons from heavy-flavor are important probes
> to
>> the properties of the quark-gluon plasma (QGP) created in heavy-ion
>> collisions. " -> Quarkonia and heavy flavor decay electrons (HFE) are
> 
>> important probes to study the properties of the quark-gluon plasma
> (QGP)
>> created in heavy-ion collisions.
>> 
>> L2-3: "The production rate changes and the directional asymmetry of
> HFE
>> reflect heavy-quark …" Not clear, please rephrase it.
>> 
>> L4-5:"Production of quarkonia involves several effects, including
>> dissociation and regeneration in the QGP …" -> "Production of
> quarkonia
>> depends on the dissociation and regeneration processes in the QGP,
> and
>> also on the cold nuclear matter effect."
>> 
>> L6-8: "…it is desirable to carry out differential measurements for
>> different quarkonium states and collision energies with high
> precision.
>> " -> "… , it is important to carry out differential precision
>> measurements for various quarkonium states and at different collision
> 
>> energies."
>> 
>> L9: large-statistics -> large statistics
>> 
>> L10: (9644Ru + 9644Ru and 9640Zr + 9640Zr) -> Please try \leftindex.
>> Reference here:
>> https://ctan.math.illinois.edu/macros/latex/contrib/leftindex/leftindex.pdf
> [1]
>> 
>> L11:  …obtained from… -> "… data collected in …"
>> 
>> L13: In this contribution, … -> In this talk,.. (or just remove)
>> 
>> L18:    of the yield suppression for J/ψ  and different Υ states ->
> of the
>> J/psi and \Upsilon states
>> yield suppression …
>> 
>> L19: binding energy-dependent  ->     binding-energy dependent
>> L20-21: "In addition, new measurements of J/ψ yields and nuclear
>> modification factors (RAA) in Au+Au different collision energies." ->
> 
>> syntax issue, and No required, drop it. It is understood.
>> 
>> 
>> L23: of Heavy Flavor Electrons (HFE)  -> of HFE
>> 
>> L24:    What’s more, the first measurement -> What’s more—the
> first
>> measurement .. [such colloquial tone better to avoid, but it is
> Ok…]
>> 
>> L25: …in both Helicity…frames,  which> … in both the
> Helicity… frames
>> which
>> 
>> L27: …in these collisions. -> I think this measurement is for one
>> collision energy in Isobar. Is not it? If so, then remove it.
>> 
>> 
>> 
>> Cheers
>> Nihar
>> 
>> 
>> 
>> On 2023-06-21 20:54, Dandan wrote:
>>> Hi All,
>>> 
>>> This is our marge abstract for QM2023 , it can be found in this
> link:
>>> 
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/QM2023_Abstract_ver3.pdf
>>> 
>>> Best,
>>> Dandan
>>> 
>>> 发件人：Dandan <shendandan AT mail.sdu.edu.cn>
>>> 发送日期：2023-06-20 11:37:39
>>> 收件人：Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>
>>> 抄送人：Yan <wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn>,Te-Chuan Huang
>>> <tchuang AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>,Wei
> <wzhang AT m.scnu.edu.cn>,"v.d.prozorova"
>>> <v.d.prozorova AT gmail.com>,YiYang <yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw>,Isaac
>>> <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>,HP <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
>>> 主题：Re:Re: Merging of QM abstracts
>>> 
>>>> Hi Nihar，
>>>> 
>>>> Thanks for your comment.
>>>> We discuss and improve the marge abstract. I will send you a new
>>>> version to you.
>>>> 
>>>> Best,
>>>> Dandan
>>>> 
>>>> From: Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>
>>>> Date: 2023-06-20 10:30:34
>>>> To:  Dandan <shendandan AT mail.sdu.edu.cn>
>>>> Cc:  Yan <wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn>,Te-Chuan Huang
>>>> <tchuang AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>,Wei
>>>> <wzhang AT m.scnu.edu.cn>,"v.d.prozorova"
>>>> <v.d.prozorova AT gmail.com>,YiYang <yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw>,Isaac
>>>> <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>,HP <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
>>>> Subject: Re: Merging of QM abstracts>Hello PAs and Dandan,
>>>>> 
>>>>> Thank you for bringing this merged abstract.
>>>>> This looks a bit long abstract, could you please make it a
> shorter
>>>>> version?
>>>>> As this is already an accepted by QM organizer and suggested for
>>>> merging
>>>>> then I think you can make it brief on each physics topics to make
>>>> it
>>>>> shorter. please try from your side first.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Cheers
>>>>> Nihar
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> On 2023-06-19 19:40, Dandan wrote:
>>>>>> Hi ,all
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> This is our marge abstract for QM2023 , it can be found in this
>>>> link:
>>>>>> 
>>>> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/QM2023Abstract_0.pdf
>>>>>> 
>>>>>> Best,
>>>>>> Dandan
> 
> 
> 
> Links:
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> [1] 
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