STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Dandan and PAs,

Please find my comments on your nice abstract.


J/ψ  -> $J/\psi$ all places

L1-2: "Quarkonia and electrons from heavy-flavor are important probes to 
the properties of the quark-gluon plasma (QGP) created in heavy-ion 
collisions. " -> Quarkonia and heavy flavor decay electrons (HFE) are 
important probes to study the properties of the quark-gluon plasma (QGP) 
created in heavy-ion collisions.

L2-3: "The production rate changes and the directional asymmetry of HFE 
reflect heavy-quark …" Not clear, please rephrase it.

L4-5:"Production of quarkonia involves several effects, including 
dissociation and regeneration in the QGP …" -> "Production of quarkonia 
depends on the dissociation and regeneration processes in the QGP, and 
also on the cold nuclear matter effect."

L6-8: "…it is desirable to carry out differential measurements for 
different quarkonium states and collision energies with high precision. 
" -> "… , it is important to carry out differential precision 
measurements for various quarkonium states and at different collision 
energies."

L9: large-statistics -> large statistics

L10: (9644Ru + 9644Ru and 9640Zr + 9640Zr) -> Please try \leftindex. 
Reference here: 
https://ctan.math.illinois.edu/macros/latex/contrib/leftindex/leftindex.pdf

L11:  …obtained from… -> "… data collected in …"

L13: In this contribution, … -> In this talk,.. (or just remove)

L18:	of the yield suppression for J/ψ  and different Υ states -> of the 
J/psi and \Upsilon states
yield suppression …

L19: binding energy-dependent  ->    binding-energy dependent
L20-21: "In addition, new measurements of J/ψ yields and nuclear 
modification factors (RAA) in Au+Au different collision energies." -> 
syntax issue, and No required, drop it. It is understood.


L23: of Heavy Flavor Electrons (HFE)  -> of HFE

L24:	What’s more, the first measurement -> What’s more—the first 
measurement .. [such colloquial tone better to avoid, but it is Ok…]

L25: …in both Helicity…frames,  which> … in both the Helicity… frames 
which

L27: …in these collisions. -> I think this measurement is for one 
collision energy in Isobar. Is not it? If so, then remove it.



Cheers
Nihar



On 2023-06-21 20:54, Dandan wrote:
> Hi All,
>
> This is our marge abstract for QM2023 , it can be found in this link:
> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/QM2023_Abstract_ver3.pdf
>
> Best,
> Dandan
>
> 发件人：Dandan <shendandan AT mail.sdu.edu.cn>
> 发送日期：2023-06-20 11:37:39
> 收件人：Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>
> 抄送人：Yan <wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn>,Te-Chuan Huang
> <tchuang AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>,Wei <wzhang AT m.scnu.edu.cn>,"v.d.prozorova"
> <v.d.prozorova AT gmail.com>,YiYang <yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw>,Isaac
> <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>,HP <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> 主题：Re:Re: Merging of QM abstracts
>
> > Hi Nihar，
> >
> > Thanks for your comment.
> > We discuss and improve the marge abstract. I will send you a new
> > version to you.
> >
> > Best,
> > Dandan
> >
> > From: Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>
> > Date: 2023-06-20 10:30:34
> > To:  Dandan <shendandan AT mail.sdu.edu.cn>
> > Cc:  Yan <wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn>,Te-Chuan Huang
> > <tchuang AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>,Wei
> > <wzhang AT m.scnu.edu.cn>,"v.d.prozorova"
> > <v.d.prozorova AT gmail.com>,YiYang <yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw>,Isaac
> > <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>,HP <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> > Subject: Re: Merging of QM abstracts>Hello PAs and Dandan,
> > > Thank you for bringing this merged abstract.
> > > This looks a bit long abstract, could you please make it a shorter
> > > version?
> > > As this is already an accepted by QM organizer and suggested for
> > merging
> > > then I think you can make it brief on each physics topics to make
> > it
> > > shorter. please try from your side first.
> > >
> > > Cheers
> > > Nihar
> > >
> > >
> > > On 2023-06-19 19:40, Dandan wrote:
> > > > Hi ,all
> > > >
> > > > This is our marge abstract for QM2023 , it can be found in this
> > link:
> > > >
> > https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/QM2023Abstract_0.pdf
> > > > Best,
> > > > Dandan