STAR HardProbes PWG

[Yi Yang <yiyang0429 AT gmail.com>]

Hi Tristan,

Thanks a lot for the well-written proceedings, I only have some minor comments for your consideration. 

 - General: it would be good to specifically mention this is the v2 for "charged jets" somewhere. 

 - General: A+A and p+p --> $A$ + $A$ and $p$ + $p$

 - Genera: Zr + Zr and Ru + Ru --> to be consistent with atomic and mass numbersL or not (for example L28 and L31) 

 - v_2^{jet}: "jet" looks a bit large to me (it seems to have the same font size as normal text), do you know why? 

 - L18 - L20: Do you need to use bold here? 

 - L19: These --> these

 - L27: I would merge this line to the previous one, it is a bit strange to me that a paragraph only has one line. But it is entirely up to you. 

 - L54: 0.4, 0.6 --> 0.4, and 0.6

 - L58: [8] --> Ref. [8] 

 - L60, Eq.(3): it would be good if pT^{reco} can be mentioned somewhere before, for example "pT^{reco} is the reconstructed jet transverse momentum"

 - L83: 0.4, 0.6 --> 0.4, and 0.6

 - L83: figure 1 --> Fig. 1

 - L86 - 91: you should mention Figure 2 somewhere in this paragraph. 

 - L103: Ongoing work to further this goal --> Ongoing work to this goal... (since there is another "further" later, I would remove the first one.) 

Cheers,

Yi

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