STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Tristan,

Sorry for being late to read your proceedings.
Please find my comments on your nice proceedings.

Abstract:
You may consider to shorten your abstract if possible.

L9: "…the transport of momentum through " -> Not clear, rephrase
L10: "it is useful to identify a controllable … -> it doesn't sound 
good. Please rephrase
L14: "processes as it traverses the QGP, …"-> 	 …traversing through the 
QGP, …;
 insight into… -> insight of the QGP dynamics.

L16:  The jet energy loss can be described … -> The jet energy loss are 
measured …

L18-20: What is reason to make it "bold statement"? Make it un-bold.
L19: "These difference …" -> what difference? And this sentence is not 
clear. Elaborate it.

L21: "In a semi-central heavy-ion collision, in general an approximately 
elliptical QGP will be produced." -> "The QGP is produced in an 
elliptical geometry due to overlapping shape in a semi-central heavy-ion 
collision."

L57: excluding the two hardest. ->           excluding the two hardest jets.

L65: 𝑝T > 2 GeV  -> 𝑝T > 2 GeV/{\it c} [ all places]

Eq.4, Please mention in the text what is eta_jet, eta_hard core and the 
same for phi.

L82: for tracks with 5 < 𝑝reco < 22.5 GeV/c  -> is that pT^reco for 
track ?
jets with 10 < 𝑝reco -> jets with 10 < 𝑝_{\rm T, jet}^{\rm reco } …

L87: 10 < 𝑝T < 22.5  -> 10 < 𝑝_T,jet^reco < 22.5

L98: "Further complicating …quenching signatures." -> Very complicated 
sentence, Please rephrase this.
L103: "Ongoing work to further this goal …" -> "The future goal of this 
work …"
L104: path length, as well as -> path length as well as
ESE -> The ESE


Cheers
Nihar


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