STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Wei,

Thank you for your nice results and poster.

Please find my comments below.

Make J/psi italic all places

Title:
1_ \Sqrt S_NN -> Make "S" italic [all places]
2_ …detector.  -> remover period

3_ Wei Zhang(wzhang -> Put a gap like "Wei Zhang (wzhang…"

Abstract: You can consider to make your abstract a bit more concise and 
also make your text size uniform all over the poster body. It looks like 
abstract text size relatively larger front.

Motivation:

4_which means -> hence or so
5_…as a more sensitive probe  … -> as a sensitive probe
6_BESII -> BES-II
7_"The data collected from BESII is critical for exploring the critical 
point of QGP phase transition." -> This sentence doesn't fit to your 
objective of this analysis. Better mention why you are looking at "beam 
energy dependence of J/psi yield" .

Analysis procedure:

8_ "…to extraction of raw …" -> "…to extract the raw…"
9_ "	The function of fitting UL-sign including Three component " -> 
rephrase it. Not clear. And Mention what is UL-sign?

STAR detector:

10_Time projection chamber -> Time projection chamber:  [Similarly for 
other detectors]
And then use bullet  to lowers attributes [same for others]

Results and conclusion

11_ Can you please make your plots a bit larger size which are main 
important results? And try to put less wording with very concise so that 
you can have more space.
For example, first bullet "We measured the inclusive…" not needed. 
Remove it.

12_ In this section, you did not discuss where you get pp baseline. You 
need to add one-two bullets on it.
13_ Npart -> averge N_part or mention some where what is Npart?
14_ RAA ->R_AA
15_ "We extended the measurement results of J/ψ RAA to the low energy 
region." This is not needed. Remove it. People can see it.
16_ In each plot, put "STAR preliminary" inside the figure, not outside. 
And also "Au+Au collisions"


Cheers
Nihar

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