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[wy157543 AT mail.ustc.edu.cn]

Hi Yi,

Thank you for your nice comments.

The new version can be found in this link, please have a look:
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/66082

best,
Yan

-----原始邮件-----
发件人:"Yi Yang" <yiyang0429 AT gmail.com>
发送时间:2023-12-08 22:08:43 (星期五)
收件人: "STAR HardProbes PWG" <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
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主题: Re: [Star-hp-l] STAR presentation by Yan Wang for Quark Matter 2023 submitted for review

Hi Yan,

Thanks a lot for the nice proceedings. I only have some minor comments/suggestions for your consideration. 

 - L16: quark gluon plasma --> Quark-Gluon Plasma (to be consistent with others) 

 - L37: I would move "Due to unavailability of inclusive J/ψ cross-section measurements  in p+p collisions at √sNN = 14.6, 19.6, and 27 GeV, the p+p baselines are derived through  interpolations from world-wide datasets [3]." to line 41, after the RAA result, since it seems to be more natural to mention pp baseline when you talk about RAA.  

 - L43: at 200 GeV --> at sqrt(sNN) = 200 GeV or Au+Au collisions at 200 GeV 

 - L45: I think you can remove "for 200 GeV". 

 - L46/Caption: you use "as a function of collision energy" and "as a function of sqrt(sNN) ", it would be nice to be consistent 

 - L61: Fig.3 --> Figure 3

 - Figure 2 Caption: The error --> the error 

 - Figure 3 Caption: [20, 21],and A+A --> missing a space in front of "and" 

                                 The error --> the error 

 - L66: helicity --> Helicity

 - L69: I think the slides of J/psi polarization says "hint of non-trivial pT dependence". 

 - References: you can remove "arXiv numbers" if they are published. 

Cheers,

Yi

 

On Tue, Dec 5, 2023 at 12:56 AM wy157543--- via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Nihar,

Thank you for your nice comments.
Due to space constraints, not all references are listed (those using their data points are prioritized)

The new version can be found in this link:
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/66082

best,
Yan





> -----原始邮件-----
> 发件人: "Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l" <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> 发送时间: 2023-12-04 10:34:43 (星期一)
> 收件人: "STAR HardProbes PWG" <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov>
> 抄送: "Nihar Sahoo" <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>, webmaster AT star.bnl.gov
> 主题: Re: [Star-hp-l] STAR presentation by Yan Wang for Quark Matter 2023 submitted for review
>
> Hello Yan,
>
> Please find below my comments on your nice proceedings.
>
> General:
> J/ψ -> make "J" italic all places
> isobaric collisions -> isobar collisions
>
> L7:We report on quarkonium (J/ψ and ψ(2S)) measurements -> We report the
> measurements of quarkonium (J/ψ and ψ(2S))
> L15:  in both Helicity and Collins-Soper frames -> in both the helicity
> and the Collins-Soper frames
> L15-16: a new angle -> a new insight ;
> in these collisions -> in heavy-ion collisions
> L21: "The anticipated dissociation …" -> give references
> L24:  Alongside dissociation in the medium -> Alongside the dissociation
> in the medium
>        effects -> the effects
> L25: to the experimentally measured yields -> to the measured yields
> L25-24: Give references
> L33: J/psi -> The J/psi
> L34: applying event-level -> applying the event-level
>               quality cuts -> selections ["quality cuts" is a jargon, avoid it in
> writing]
> "After applying event-level and track quality cuts,…" -> After applying
> good event and track selection criteria, the electron
>
> L36:  Considering the absence of inclusive -> Due to unavailability of
> inclusive …
> L40:  figure 1 -> Fig.1. [same 45 and 67]
> L41: for energies of -> at \sNN=
> L46: This could result from a -> This could be due to a combination…
> L47:calculation ,  -> calculation,
> L48: describe data with an indication of underestimation at 27 GeV and
> below.->      describe the data but quantitatively underestimates below \sNN
> = 27 GeV.
> L51: isobaric collisions -> isobar collisions [elsewhere]
> L61: is significant lower  ->                 is significantly lower [same in L75]
>
> L68:   of λinv between -> mention what is λinv ?
>
> Fig.3 caption: "For measurements from heavy-ion collisions, the error…"
> -> The error… [same for Fig,2]
>
>
> Best
> Nihar
>
>
>
>
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