STAR HardProbes PWG

[Yi Yang <yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw>]

Hi Ziyang,

Thanks a lot for the nice proceedings. I have some minor comments for your consideration. 

  - General: the order of you references are strange, it starts with [11, 12] in L16 

                   dielectron or di-electron, you have to pick one and make it consistent over the whole article (many places).

                   change dimuon to mu+ mu- ? 

  - L10: implication is --> implications are

  - L31: In this proceeding 

  - L33: pT and pT^2 --> pT, and pT^2

  - L40: [10], (2) --> [10]; (2) 

  - L42: add a space in front of [9]

  - L43: I would suggest to rewrite this sentence to something like (Just for your consideration....): "The combinatorial background is estimated using the unlike-sign distribution from mixed-events. However, in the low mass regions, since the correlated backgrounds are not negligible and can not be reproduced by the mixed-event method, the dimuon like-sign distributio  from the same-events is used to remove the backgrounds."  

  - Eq(1): add a comma in the end, 

  - L56: Where --> where

  - L76: Put references for EPA-QED and STARlight here, you can remove the ones in L80. 

  

Cheers,

Yi

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On Fri, Nov 11, 2022 at 8:41 PM zli1 via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Nihar,

Thanks for your nice comments, I upload a new version. Please have a
look.
By the way, I can only edit the file in this link:
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/61422

This proceeding is limited in 6 pages, now it is over the limit a bit. I
think I could reduce the words after other comments.

L13：add "such as the Chiral Magnetic Effect (CME), anisotropic
charmonium production, spin-charge correlation for final-state hadrons,
and so on."
L14：rephrased: "However, there is a lack of experimental measurements of
the proprieties of the EM fields."
L27: add "In total, an integrated luminosity of 14.2 $\rm nb^{-1}$ was
sampled by the dimuon trigger." (and the integrated luminosity of MB
trigger used in dimuon analysis is 0.2 nb^{-1}, I'm not sure if it is
also needed to list here)
L33: rephrased: "The low mass di-muon (0.4<$\rm M_{\mu\mu$<0.64
GeV/$c^{2}$) and the J/$\psi$ (2.9<$\rm M_{\mu\mu$<3.2 GeV/$c^{2}$)
production are analysed separately."

Best,
Ziyang

On 2022-11-09 19:59, Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l wrote:
> Hello Ziyang,
>
> Please find my comments on your nice proceedings.
>
> GeV/c -> GeV/$c$ (all places)
> p+p -> $p+p$
>
> Abstract Line 10: "In this contribution, we present recent …" -> "We
> present the recent…"
> "...and its physical implications…" -> "... , and its implication is
> discussed."
>
> L12: "…fields can be induced …" -> "  …fields are induced…"
> L12: "In heavy-ion collisions, … the relativistic heavy ions " -> "In
> the relativistic heavy-ion collisions, … the heavy ions "
> L13:"…                various interesting phenomena …" -> "…          various interesting
> phenomena, like " Mention what are those "interesting phenomena"?
> L14: ", while there is a lack of clear experimental measurements of
> the strength and spatial of the EM fields." -> Not clear. Please
> rephrase it and make a separate sentence.
> L15-16: "…, leading to photon-induced  interactions []" -> remove
> comma.
> L17: "significant enhancements of…" -> "a significant enhancement of
> dilepton pairs and the J/shi…"
> L23:"The measurements of very low 𝑝T vector meson and dilepton
> production in peripheral heavy-ion collisions …" -> "The measurements
> of the vector meson and dilepton production at very low pT in
> peripheral events…"
> L24: "to study photoproduction in collisions" -> "to study the
> photoproduction in heavy-ion collisions"
> L25: "                and smaller impact parameters " -> "…and relatively smaller
> impact parameters.."
> "It also provide …" -> "It also provides information of the strength
> and the spatial distribution of the EM fields produced in these
> collisions."
> L27: " In 2014, the STAR experiment recorded large samples of Au+Au
> collisions at √𝑠NN =200GeV. " -> "The STAR experiment recorded the
> large sample of datasets in Au+Au collisions at √𝑠NN =200GeV in 2014.
> " Please provide lumi. of your dataset to support your "large sample
> data"
> L28: "In this contribution, we will present new measurements …" ->"In
> this proceeding, we present the new measurements of the dilepton and
> the J/shi production at very low pT in peripheral collisions…"
> L30:"…𝑝T and 𝑝2T will be shown. " -> "              𝑝T, and 𝑝2T are shown."
> L30-31:"      Physical  implications will also be discussed together with
> model comparisons. " -> "Different models are compared to the data and
> their implications are finally discussed."
>
>
> L33: "This contribution…" -> what contribution? In the previous
> sentence, you have already discussed about dataset and 2014. Please
> rephrase this.
> L35:"For J/𝜓, " -> "for the J/𝜓 measurement,…"
> L37: "… (MTD)[9]. (2) For…" -> "… (MTD)[9], (2) for…."  (There should
> be "comma" after 1st bullet)
> L38:"…        minimub-bias trigger events …" -> "     minimub-bias events "
> L39:"Time of flight" -> "Time-of-Flight"
> L40:"…candidates from the same event are paired …" ->"…candidates,
> from the same event, are paired …"
> L41:"mass spectra, the combinatorial background is …" -> "…mass
> spectra. The combinatorial background is…"
> L42 and 43: "mixed-events" -> "the mixed-events";  "from same-events"
> ->"from the same-events"
> L45: "obtained, while the J/shi…" -> "obtained. The J/shi…"
> "the maximum likelihood method." ->Give reference
>
> L49: "Data points are fitted by Tsallis function … -> "The data points
> are fitted by the Tsallis function …"
> "… significant enhancement …" -> (Make another sentence)
> "Significant…."
> L50-51: "To quantify the J/shi production modification in hadronic
> A+A…" -> "To quantify the relative suppression of J/shi production in
> Au+Au …"
> L52: "… , Which is defined as …" -> (Make a new sentence) "It is
> defined as,"
> Eq1: Define what are enumerator, denominator, N_coll?
> L53-54: "A large enhancement of 𝑅𝐴𝐴 above unity …" -> "A large
> enhancement of the J/shi yield in peripheral collisions relative to
> the $p+p$ collisions is observed. It strongly suggests the excess
> J/shi yield is due to the photon-induced production in peripheral
> collisions."
> L59: "…shows J/𝜓 yields …" -> "…shows the J/𝜓 yields …"
> N_{part} -> $N_{\rm part}$
>
> L70: "EPA-QED calculations …" -> "The EPA-QED calculations …"
> L71: "….that 𝑝T …" -> "… that the pT…"
> L72." …impact parameter dependence and should be considered. " ->
> "…    impact parameter dependence." (Rest not needed)
>
> L75: "for comparison. EPA-QED…" -> "…for the comparison. The EPA-QED…"
> L76: "STARlight …" ->"The STARlight…" ; "data" -> "the data"
> L82:" In this contribution, measurements …" -> "The measurements …"
> L85:"The results are compatible with the theoretical calculations with
> EPA, show the enhancements …" -> "The data are comparable with the EPA
> calculations indicating the enhancements … "
>
>
> Cheers
> Nihar
>
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