STAR HardProbes PWG

[Yi Yang <yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw>]

Hi Zhiyang,

Thanks a lot for the updated version. I don't have any further comments (please forget about L31... it is okay now..).

Cheers,

Yi

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Yi Yang, Associate Professor
Department of Physics / 

Director of Science Education Center

National Cheng Kung University
Tainan, 701 Taiwan
E-Mail: yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw
Tel: +886-6-2757575 ext.65237
Fax: +886-6-2747995
Group Web: http://phys.ncku.edu.tw/~yiyang
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On Thu, Nov 17, 2022 at 3:25 PM zli1 <zli1 AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Sooraj and Yi,

Thanks for your useful comments, I upload a new version v2 on drupal.

Based on Sooraj's comments, in addition to the modified text,
I rewrite sec 2
I adjust the order of figures and corresponding discussions in sec 3.2,
now they follow pT,pT^2, and mass distribution.

Based on Yi's comments, in addition to the modified text,
I think dielectron is better, thank you! And I changed dimuon to mu+
mu-, except in the title and dimuon trigger.
  - L31: In this proceeding   Sorry, I didn't catch your meaning.
L76, since I adjust the order, so the references are still in the same
position.

Best,
Ziyang
On 2022-11-16 11:23, Yi Yang wrote:
> Hi Ziyang,
>
> Thanks a lot for the nice proceedings. I have some minor comments for
> your consideration.
>   - General: the order of you references are strange, it starts with
> [11, 12] in L16
>                    dielectron or di-electron, you have to pick one and
> make it consistent over the whole article (many places).
>                    change dimuon to mu+ mu- ?
>   - L10: implication is --> implications are
>   - L31: In this proceeding
>   - L33: pT and pT^2 --> pT, and pT^2
>   - L40: [10], (2) --> [10]; (2)
>   - L42: add a space in front of [9]
>   - L43: I would suggest to rewrite this sentence to something like
> (Just for your consideration....): "The combinatorial background is
> estimated using the unlike-sign distribution from mixed-events.
> However, in the low mass regions, since the correlated backgrounds are
> not negligible and can not be reproduced by the mixed-event method,
> the dimuon like-sign distributio  from the same-events is used to
> remove the backgrounds."
>   - Eq(1): add a comma in the end,
>   - L56: Where --> where
>   - L76: Put references for EPA-QED and STARlight here, you can remove
> the ones in L80.
>
> Cheers,
> Yi
>
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> Yi Yang, Associate Professor
> Department of Physics /
> Director of Science Education Center
> National Cheng Kung University
> Tainan, 701 Taiwan
> E-Mail: yiyang AT ncku.edu.tw
> Tel: +886-6-2757575 ext.65237
> Fax: +886-6-2747995
> Group Web: http://phys.ncku.edu.tw/~yiyang [1]
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>
> On Fri, Nov 11, 2022 at 8:41 PM zli1 via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
>
>> Hello Nihar,
>>
>> Thanks for your nice comments, I upload a new version. Please have a
>>
>> look.
>> By the way, I can only edit the file in this link:
>> https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/node/61422
>>
>> This proceeding is limited in 6 pages, now it is over the limit a
>> bit. I
>> think I could reduce the words after other comments.
>>
>> L13：add "such as the Chiral Magnetic Effect (CME), anisotropic
>> charmonium production, spin-charge correlation for final-state
>> hadrons,
>> and so on."
>> L14：rephrased: "However, there is a lack of experimental
>> measurements of
>> the proprieties of the EM fields."
>> L27: add "In total, an integrated luminosity of 14.2 $\rm nb^{-1}$
>> was
>> sampled by the dimuon trigger." (and the integrated luminosity of MB
>>
>> trigger used in dimuon analysis is 0.2 nb^{-1}, I'm not sure if it
>> is
>> also needed to list here)
>> L33: rephrased: "The low mass di-muon (0.4<$\rm M_{\mu\mu$<0.64
>> GeV/$c^{2}$) and the J/$\psi$ (2.9<$\rm M_{\mu\mu$<3.2 GeV/$c^{2}$)
>> production are analysed separately."
>>
>> Best,
>> Ziyang
>>
>> On 2022-11-09 19:59, Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l wrote:
>>> Hello Ziyang,
>>>
>>> Please find my comments on your nice proceedings.
>>>
>>> GeV/c -> GeV/$c$ (all places)
>>> p+p -> $p+p$
>>>
>>> Abstract Line 10: "In this contribution, we present recent …" ->
>> "We
>>> present the recent…"
>>> "...and its physical implications…" -> "... , and its
>> implication is
>>> discussed."
>>>
>>> L12: "…fields can be induced …" -> "  …fields are
>> induced…"
>>> L12: "In heavy-ion collisions, … the relativistic heavy ions "
>> -> "In
>>> the relativistic heavy-ion collisions, … the heavy ions "
>>> L13:"…                various interesting phenomena …" -> "…
>> various interesting
>>> phenomena, like " Mention what are those "interesting phenomena"?
>>> L14: ", while there is a lack of clear experimental measurements
>> of
>>> the strength and spatial of the EM fields." -> Not clear. Please
>>> rephrase it and make a separate sentence.
>>> L15-16: "…, leading to photon-induced  interactions []" ->
>> remove
>>> comma.
>>> L17: "significant enhancements of…" -> "a significant
>> enhancement of
>>> dilepton pairs and the J/shi…"
>>> L23:"The measurements of very low 𝑝T vector meson and dilepton
>>> production in peripheral heavy-ion collisions …" -> "The
>> measurements
>>> of the vector meson and dilepton production at very low pT in
>>> peripheral events…"
>>> L24: "to study photoproduction in collisions" -> "to study the
>>> photoproduction in heavy-ion collisions"
>>> L25: "                and smaller impact parameters " -> "…and
>> relatively smaller
>>> impact parameters.."
>>> "It also provide …" -> "It also provides information of the
>> strength
>>> and the spatial distribution of the EM fields produced in these
>>> collisions."
>>> L27: " In 2014, the STAR experiment recorded large samples of
>> Au+Au
>>> collisions at √𝑠NN =200GeV. " -> "The STAR experiment
>> recorded the
>>> large sample of datasets in Au+Au collisions at √𝑠NN =200GeV
>> in 2014.
>>> " Please provide lumi. of your dataset to support your "large
>> sample
>>> data"
>>> L28: "In this contribution, we will present new measurements …"
>> ->"In
>>> this proceeding, we present the new measurements of the dilepton
>> and
>>> the J/shi production at very low pT in peripheral collisions…"
>>> L30:"…𝑝T and 𝑝2T will be shown. " -> "              𝑝T,
>> and 𝑝2T are shown."
>>> L30-31:"      Physical  implications will also be discussed
>> together with
>>> model comparisons. " -> "Different models are compared to the data
>> and
>>> their implications are finally discussed."
>>>
>>>
>>> L33: "This contribution…" -> what contribution? In the previous
>>> sentence, you have already discussed about dataset and 2014.
>> Please
>>> rephrase this.
>>> L35:"For J/𝜓, " -> "for the J/𝜓 measurement,…"
>>> L37: "… (MTD)[9]. (2) For…" -> "… (MTD)[9], (2) for…."
>> (There should
>>> be "comma" after 1st bullet)
>>> L38:"…        minimub-bias trigger events …" -> "
>> minimub-bias events "
>>> L39:"Time of flight" -> "Time-of-Flight"
>>> L40:"…candidates from the same event are paired …"
>> ->"…candidates,
>>> from the same event, are paired …"
>>> L41:"mass spectra, the combinatorial background is …" ->
>> "…mass
>>> spectra. The combinatorial background is…"
>>> L42 and 43: "mixed-events" -> "the mixed-events";  "from
>> same-events"
>>> ->"from the same-events"
>>> L45: "obtained, while the J/shi…" -> "obtained. The J/shi…"
>>> "the maximum likelihood method." ->Give reference
>>>
>>> L49: "Data points are fitted by Tsallis function … -> "The data
>> points
>>> are fitted by the Tsallis function …"
>>> "… significant enhancement …" -> (Make another sentence)
>>> "Significant…."
>>> L50-51: "To quantify the J/shi production modification in hadronic
>>> A+A…" -> "To quantify the relative suppression of J/shi
>> production in
>>> Au+Au …"
>>> L52: "… , Which is defined as …" -> (Make a new sentence) "It
>> is
>>> defined as,"
>>> Eq1: Define what are enumerator, denominator, N_coll?
>>> L53-54: "A large enhancement of 𝑅𝐴𝐴 above unity …" ->
>> "A large
>>> enhancement of the J/shi yield in peripheral collisions relative
>> to
>>> the $p+p$ collisions is observed. It strongly suggests the excess
>>> J/shi yield is due to the photon-induced production in peripheral
>>> collisions."
>>> L59: "…shows J/𝜓 yields …" -> "…shows the J/𝜓 yields
>> …"
>>> N_{part} -> $N_{\rm part}$
>>>
>>> L70: "EPA-QED calculations …" -> "The EPA-QED calculations …"
>>> L71: "….that 𝑝T …" -> "… that the pT…"
>>> L72." …impact parameter dependence and should be considered. "
>> ->
>>> "…    impact parameter dependence." (Rest not needed)
>>>
>>> L75: "for comparison. EPA-QED…" -> "…for the comparison. The
>> EPA-QED…"
>>> L76: "STARlight …" ->"The STARlight…" ; "data" -> "the data"
>>> L82:" In this contribution, measurements …" -> "The measurements
>> …"
>>> L85:"The results are compatible with the theoretical calculations
>> with
>>> EPA, show the enhancements …" -> "The data are comparable with
>> the EPA
>>> calculations indicating the enhancements … "
>>>
>>>
>>> Cheers
>>> Nihar
>>>
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>>>>
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