STAR HardProbes PWG

[Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hello Monika,

Please find my comments on your nice abstract.

Title:
"SYSTEMATIC EXPLORATION OF THE PERTURBATIVE AND NON-PERTURBATIVE JET 
SUBSTRUCTURE AT RHIC"

How about this?
SYSTEMATIC EXPLORATION OF THE PERTURBATIVE AND NON-PERTURBATIVE OF JET 
SUBSTRUCTURE in pp \sqrt{s}=200 GeV by STAR

Here:
"THE PERTURBATIVE AND NON-PERTURBATIVE JET SUBSTRUCTURE " doesn't sound 
good and not clear? Is there any better way to write?


L5: "Since jets are…" -> Jets are…
L6:"…hadrons, jet substructure…" -> "…hadrons. Jet substructure…"
L8: "In this study we use…" -> "In this study, we use…"
L10: "Cambridge/Aachen reclustering tree." -> Cambridge/Aachen 
reclustering algorithm. (Tree doesn't fit well here)
L15:"One of these observables…" -> This is not needed. Seems arbitrary.
L24: Finally, the data
L25: Monte Carlo models, such as …

Cheers
Nihar

On 2022-11-27 21:28, Barbara Trzeciak via Star-hp-l wrote:
> Hi Monika,
>
> I have minor comments and sign off your nice abstract.
>
> - Title: I would suggest adding STAR
> - L18: In particular we explore -> In particular, we explore
>
> Cheers,
> Barbara
>
> On Wed, Nov 23, 2022 at 8:57 AM Barbara Trzeciak
> <barbara.trzeciak AT gmail.com> wrote:
>
> > Hi Monika,
> > that sounds good. Thank you for the combined abstract.
> >
> > Cheers,
> > Barbara
> >
> > On Wed, Nov 23, 2022 at 1:09 AM Monika Robotková via Star-hp-l
> > <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> >
> > > Dear all,
> > > we prepared abstract that combines Youqi's, Raghav's and my
> > > analyses. Because neither of them is able to go to Hard Probes, we
> > > decided to prepare only one contribution which should be presented
> > > by me in case the abstract is accepted.
> > >
> > > Best regards,
> > > Monika
> > >
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> > > Monika Robotkova (robotmon AT fjfi.cvut.cz) has submitted a material
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