STAR HardProbes PWG

[Yi Yang <yiyang0429 AT gmail.com>]

Hi Yang,

Thanks a lot for the nice proceedings. I only have some minor comments for your consideration. 

 - General: p+p --> $p$+$p$, A+A --> $A$+$A$

 - L10: Jet --> jet

 - L21 - L22: AA and pp --> $A$+$A$ and $p$+$p$  (same for L25 and 26)

 - L21 - L24: I would suggest: move Eq.(1) after "as a formula below:" and add a comma after Eq.1, then change "and can be directly"  to (It can be directly" after Eq. 1

 - L26: is denoted as I_AA: 

 - Eq. 2: Add a period at the end. 

 - L38: gamma_dir +jet spectrum --> The gamma-dir+jet spectrum  

 - L47: recoil jets. --> recoil jets: 

 - L52: <Npart> --> $\langle N_{part} \rangle$

 - L60: add a reference for BSMD. 

 - L61: merge this sentence to the previous one. 

 - L63: gamma_dir --> The gamma_dir

 - L65: reference for TSP? 

 - L69: reference for anti-kT algorithm 

 - L70: Mixed-event --> Mixed-Event

 - L74: In final --> Finally  

           Merge this sentence to the previous one.

 - L79: transverse energy (ET) --> ET  (you already defined it in L63)

 - L81: remove the extra comma 

 - L89: Pythia8 MONASH --> PYTHIA-8 Monah (to be consistent with the plot) 

 - L90: Pythia--> PYTHIA

 - Figure 2 caption: 

        Ratio --> Ratios 

        missed a period at the end. 

 - L94: Pythia--> PYTHIA

 - L98: Pythia--> PYTHIA

 - Figure 3 caption: Delta_Phi --> The Delta_Phi 

 - Figure 4 caption: h+jet --> The h+jet

 - L112: Remove "And" 

 - L112: ratio --> ratios 

 - L114: Delta_Phi distributions --> The Delta_Phi distributions

 

Cheers,

Yi

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