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[yanghe <yanghe AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>]

Hi Isaac,

Thank you for all the comments. Please find the new version here:
https://drupal.star.bnl.gov/STAR/system/files/HP2023_yh.pdf

Best,
Yang



在 2023-07-15 07:20，Mooney, Isaac 写道：
> Hi Yang,
>
> I have some minor comments on your proceedings (please see below).
> Sorry for the delay.
>
> -Isaac
>
> General comment: figure captions should be more descriptive. Using
> Fig. 1 as an example -> "with R = 0.2 (left) and 0.5 (right), for 11 <
> E_T^trig < 15 GeV (upper panels) and ..." It would be even better to
> also include a description of the colors. Similarly for Fig. 2, 3, and
> 4, should be at least a description of which panel shows what.
> 8. "yield" -> "yields" in the last sentence.
> 10. "A jet"
> 20. "trigger-particle-normalized"
> 26.
> "Direct photon" should be defined
> "due to their lack of color charge"
> 28. These two sentences can be combined. Something like: "Firstly, the
> recoil partons from \gamma_dir triggers is significantly larger than
> that from \pi_0"."
> 30. "significantly"
> 34. "Moreover," here makes it seem like you're continuing the
> explanation for the quark/gluon fraction differences. I would change
> it to "Another difference is that high p_T..."
> 36. "the azimuthal angle" (and on 37); "is also"
> 37. "can differ from"
> 38. "higher-order"
> 42. "phenomena"
> 44. Upright "part"
> 46. "$Au$+$Au$" to be consistent with the rest.
> 47. "these proceedings"; "relatively"
> 56. "eta_trig", correct? Same comment for 59.
> 58. "GeV/c"
> 60. "two jet radii"; "by the anti-k_T"
> 61. "using the mixed-event..."
> 62. "picking"
> 63. "combining"
> 64. There should be more description of how the mixed event is
> actually used -- i.e. what you do with the mixed event once you've
> constructed it.
> 71.
> They can't (or shouldn't, I guess) be inclusive ranges. So I would
> change one, or all, square brackets to parentheses instead. Since this
> is real data we never have a value identical to the bound anyway, so
> "(" and "[" are equivalent.
> "the dark band", "the light band"
> 73. "the ratio"
> 74. "the dashed"
> 76. "the jet shower"
> 78. "compared to"
> 86. "is supposed to" -> "will"
> 91. "indicates"
> 101. "Acknowledgements"
>
> > On Jul 14, 2023, at 10:39 AM, yanghe via Star-hp-l
> > <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> > Hello Yi,
> >
> > Thank you for all the comments. I've uploaded the new version in
> > here:
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> > [1]
> >
> > Best,
> > Yang
> >
> > 在 2023-07-14 11:08，Yi Yang via Star-hp-l 写道：
> > Hi Yang,
> > Thanks a lot for the nice proceedings. I only have some minor
> > comments
> > for your consideration.
> > - General: p+p --> $p$+$p$, A+A --> $A$+$A$
> > - L10: Jet --> jet
> > - L21 - L22: AA and pp --> $A$+$A$ and $p$+$p$  (same for L25 and
> > 26)
> > - L21 - L24: I would suggest: move Eq.(1) after "as a formula
> > below:"
> > and add a comma after Eq.1, then change "and can be directly"  to
> > (It
> > can be directly" after Eq. 1
> > - L26: is denoted as I_AA:
> > - Eq. 2: Add a period at the end.
> > - L38: gamma_dir +jet spectrum --> The gamma-dir+jet spectrum
> > - L47: recoil jets. --> recoil jets:
> > - L52: <Npart> --> $\langle N_{part} \rangle$
> > - L60: add a reference for BSMD.
> > - L61: merge this sentence to the previous one.
> > - L63: gamma_dir --> The gamma_dir
> > - L65: reference for TSP?
> > - L69: reference for anti-kT algorithm
> > - L70: Mixed-event --> Mixed-Event
> > - L74: In final --> Finally
> > Merge this sentence to the previous one.
> > - L79: transverse energy (ET) --> ET  (you already defined it in
> > L63)
> > - L81: remove the extra comma
> > - L89: Pythia8 MONASH --> PYTHIA-8 Monah (to be consistent with the
> > plot)
> > - L90: Pythia--> PYTHIA
> > - Figure 2 caption:
> > Ratio --> Ratios
> > missed a period at the end.
> > - L94: Pythia--> PYTHIA
> > - L98: Pythia--> PYTHIA - Figure 3 caption: Delta_Phi --> The
> > Delta_Phi
> > - Figure 4 caption: h+jet --> The h+jet - L112: Remove "And"
> > - L112: ratio --> ratios
> > - L114: Delta_Phi distributions --> The Delta_Phi distributions
> > Cheers,
> > Yi
> > On Mon, Jul 3, 2023 at 11:11 AM webmaster--- via Star-hp-l
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