STAR HardProbes PWG

[Barbara Trzeciak <barbara.trzeciak AT gmail.com>]

HI Jeongmyung,

Nice poster. Please find below my comments. 

Abstract

- low pT,jet range -> low pT,jet values

- sNN = 200 GeV Au+Au collision background ->  Au+Au collision background at sNN = 200 GeV

Introduction

- I would remove "(pT,jet < 5 GeV/c)" - even at a bit higher pT it's challenging in central collisions 

- "9 < pT,trigger <30 (GeV/c)" - is this the trigger range you're using, or is it just from the paper ? If you follow this selection, I suggest to rather put this information to the analysis details

- I think you could make the introduction more compact and in this way focus more on the describing the analysis details in the following section

Analysis details

- What do you mean by "Mimic of previous measurements" in the green box ?

- rho estimation -> background, rho, estimation

- Correction of smearing -> Correction for smearing

By smearing you mean the background fluctuations ? It's not clear

Results I, Corrected recoil jet yield spectra

- Suggest to make the text in color in the gray boxes bold, otherwise it might be not well visible

- I'm missing explanation what are different "ME +"  - if you make introduction more compact, you could add this information to the analysis details

- It's almost impossible to read legend of the rho plot

Results II

- It's imp;possible to see the legend of the right plot

Conclusions

- Text is quite small, would be good to increase size of the text

- 200 GeV Au+Au data -> Au+Au data at \sqrt{s_NN} = 200 GeV

Cheers,

Barbara

On Fri, Sep 20, 2024 at 3:44 AM Yi Yang <yiyang429 AT gate.sinica.edu.tw> wrote:

Dear Jeongmyung,

Thanks a lot for the updated version and reply.
I don't have any further comments on it.

Cheers,
Yi


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E-Mail: yiyang429 AT gate.sinica.edu.tw
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From:jeongmyung <jeongmyung AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>
To:star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov
Cc:Yi Yang <yiyang429 AT gate.sinica.edu.tw>
Date:Fri, 20 Sep 2024 09:33:23
Subject:Re: [[Star-hp-l] ] STAR presentation by Jeongmyung Kang for HP2024 submitted for review

Dear Yi,

Thank you for the comments!
Your comment regarding the abstract was applied. Please find my new
version (Jeongmyung_2024_HP_poster_v3.pdf).

>>  - Could you please remind me that if the PYTHIA simulation passed the
>> GEANT simulation?

- No. Since this study strongly focuses on the correction of the
heavy-ion background effects, only 200 GeV PYTHIA events with hard QCD
and toy thermal background have been utilized. There was no
consideration regarding instrumental effects in this study.


Thank you,
Jeongmyung


2024-09-19 17:38에 Yi Yang이(가) 쓴 내용:
> Dear Jeongmyung,
>
> Thanks a lot for the nice poster, and sorry for missing this before.
> I only have two minor comments for your consideration.
>  - Abstract: I would remove ", however, ".
>  - Could you please remind me that if the PYTHIA simulation passed the
> GEANT simulation? If so, it would be great to mention it and have a
> short introduction for STAR. Otherwise, I think the only connection to
> STAR is in the "title", "flow chart", "collision energy", and "future
> plan". And this study actually can be a more generic one.
>
> Cheers,
> Yi
>
>
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> Institute of Physics, Academia Sinica
> E-Mail: yiyang429 AT gate.sinica.edu.tw
> Tel: +886-2-2789-6709
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> -----Original message-----
> From:jeongmyung <jeongmyung AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>
> To:star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov
> Cc:Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov>
> Date:Mon, 16 Sep 2024 18:04:25
> Subject:Re: [[Star-hp-l] ] STAR presentation by Jeongmyung Kang for
> HP2024 submitted for review
>
> Dear Nihar,
>
> Hello, thank you for the comments.
> I applied most of your comments in the new version. Please find my new
> version (Jeongmyung_2024_HP_poster_v2.pdf)
>
> Also, I keep thinking about your comment regarding 'Flow chart'.
>
>    >_Flow chart: -> The  need of this flow chart is not clear at this
> stage. I think you can make a flow chart of your analysis procedure.
>
> One of the main purposes of this poster is to show the status of the
> on-going analysis, and at this stage, I believe it is better to keep
> the
> current flow chart.
>
>
> Thank you,
> Jeongmyung
>
> 2024-09-15 16:12에 Nihar Sahoo이(가) 쓴 내용:
>> Hello Jeongmyung,
>>
>> Please find my comments on your nice poster.
>>
>>
>> Introduction:
>>
>> _Particularly dominant contribution in low pT,jet region -> you need
>> to mention what Pt,jet range you are indicating.  Low pT,jet < 5 GeV/c
>> is that you mean.
>> _Challenges in central heavy-ion collisions -> Challenges in heavy-ion
>> collisions
>> _ E.g. -> e. g.
>> _pT spectra down to very low pT,jet -> Please mention what is that
>> "very low pT" ?
>> _pT,trigger -> need to define
>>
>> _Searching parton virtuality evolution in central heavy- ion
>> collisions -> Studying parton virtuality evolution in central heavy-
>> ion collisions
>> _ virtuality evolution -> it would be better to mention what is
>> "virtuality evolution"?
>> _ Please mention Why do we need to study virtuality evolution in
>> heavy-ion collisions?
>>
>>
>> Analysis Details:
>> _Flow chart: -> The  need of this flow chart is not clear at this
>> stage. I think you can make a flow chart of your analysis procedure.
>>
>> _"Data set" -> As you are not using any data, so you just mention
>> "Simulated events"
>> _200 GeV pp collisions -> You need to mention what type of event
>> sample you have generated. Is it non-trigger (no-Bias) or triggered
>> events for this study ( like high pT hadron, gamma, pi0 trigger
>> events)
>> _"Thermal background" -> Need to explain what is thermal background?
>>
>> Results:
>>
>> _ You need to mention what are SE and ME ?
>> _ In response matrices, you have not mentioned, what effect you have
>> implanted to create this response matrix? Like detector effects,
>> and/or heavy-ion background fluctuations effect.
>> _ Corrected recoil jet yield spectra -> You need to mention what
>> correction you are implementing (see above comment).
>>
>> In conclusion:
>> You need to mention also outlook of this study.
>>
>>
>> Best
>> Nihar
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>> On 2024-09-14 09:59, webmaster AT star.bnl.gov wrote:
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