STAR HardProbes PWG

["Mooney, Isaac" <isaac.mooney AT yale.edu>]

Hi Andrew,

The poster looks very nice — and makes me want some spumoni ice cream! I have some small comments for you below, and sign off.

Thanks,

Isaac

I have a preference for references being at the end so the rest of the poster is a bit more streamlined, but it's an aesthetic choice so you can leave it if it works better that way.

Please make an actual arrow instead of "->" :)

Your current text color makes it hard to see the difference in color on the words "perturbative" and "transition" from a reasonable distance, but maybe that's my colorblindness kicking in. 

What doesn't become clear for a non-expert from the Motivation or EEC section is why other observables which also access the angular scale of radiation (e.g. Rg) aren't able to do what the EEC does.

Careful with the colorcoding of TPC and EMC here since you use orange and green elsewhere. Might want to just make them bold/underlined/italicized in the same color as the normal text.

"slice" is informal -> "from a selection on truth pT,jet in the response matrix" or similar

"observed by EEC" is odd. Your choice on how to address it.

"Separates scales of interaction with Quark-Gluon Plasma" should probably be changed to "Can potentially separate scales..." since I don't think this is a settled discussion.

"In future, can probe hadronization changes by separating into correlations with different charge signs." or similar. Also not exactly sure what is meant by "hadronization changes". Maybe you meant "Probes how hadronization changes"?

On Aug 28, 2023, at 12:34 PM, Andrew Tamis via Star-hp-l <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hi Nihar,

Apologies, I uploaded the changes on the first link of the chain, but it seems like that points to a slightly different link than the second, I have updated both

Best,

Andrew

On Mon, Aug 28, 2023 at 12:47 AM Nihar Sahoo <nihar AT rcf.rhic.bnl.gov> wrote:

Hello Andrew,

I can't see any changes in the poster.
Have you applied in "Tamis_QM2023_Poster_Draft_v1.pdf "?

Best
Nihar

On 2023-08-28 14:13, Andrew Tamis wrote:
> Hello Nihar,
> 
> Thank you for the nice comments, I have implemented them and uploaded
> a new version
> 
> Best,
> Andrew
> 
> On Sun, Aug 27, 2023 at 8:23 AM Nihar Sahoo via Star-hp-l
> <star-hp-l AT lists.bnl.gov> wrote:
> 
>> Hello Andrew,
>> 
>> Please find my comments on your nice posters.
>> 
>> Motivation:
>> 
>> 1_ I think those cartoons belong to Section EEC where you mention
>> the
>> _expression_.
>> Please move it. And you can make some adjustment in the wording of
>> last
>> sentence then.
>> 
>> 2_ Please mention what are E_i,j and pT_jet
>> 
>> STAR experiment..
>> 
>> 3_ "GEANT (detector level) and PYTHIA (particle level)" -> In plot,
>> you
>> used "measured" and "true".
>> Please use consistent label then.
>> 
>> Results:
>> 
>> 4_ "Behavior in non-perturbative region reflects behavior of
>> particles
>> uniformly distributed in phase-space determined via a toy model" ->
>> Not
>> clear, what you want to say here? Please rephrase it.
>> 
>> 5_ "Consistent with measurements from ALICE and CMS" -> Give
>> references
>> 
>> 6_ "𝒑𝐓𝑱𝒆𝒕" -> correct it, make consistent through out
>> the poster.
>> 
>> 7_ Jet Radius -> Jet radius
>> 
>> Cheers
>> Nihar
>> 
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